Question

Assistance with two separate peer reviews on two thesis statement based on the four questions below.

Answer 1

Use the following questions as a guideline and comment on two other classmate's thesis statements. Remember, the task here is to offer constructive criticism.

-Does the writer provide a valid assertion and points for Comparison or Contrast?
-Will the areas he/she previews adequately support and/or develop that topic? Are they set up using parallel structure?
-What revisions would you suggest?

Answer 2

is this multiple choice

Answer 3

What do you think the answer is?

Answer 4

? Its not multiple choice.. And i dont have an answer.. Im asking for other people to give their opinions -based on the questions above- on the thesis statements I posted

Answer 5

I think your thesis statements are really good! They compare and contrast nicely, and they can easily support the topic! I think there's a typo in your first one that you might want to fix though ;)

Answer 6

Neither of the thesis statements are mine.. I need two separate peer reviews on them based off of the questions above.

Answer 7

hello :)

Answer 8

i dont really know what the "parallel" structure is, but @foodles answered the 2 of the 3 questions.

Answer 9

you questions do not ask for a "why"

Answer 10

"I think your thesis statements are really good! They compare and contrast nicely, and they can easily support the topic!"
this answers q1

Answer 11

" I think there's a typo in your first one that you might want to fix though"
this answers q3

Answer 12

i dont know anything about the "parallel" structure

Answer 13

as for the typo i found two, or at least two things that can be improved.

Answer 14

short of traditional
here i would put "fall short compared to traditional"

Answer 15

second, put a period in front of "in the fact"

Answer 16

also you never want a thesis to be to long.

Answer 17

hope i helped :)

Answer 18

but give the medal to @foodles as he was the one that answered first ^.^

Answer 19

Im not asking for "why" I just need two separate peer reviews. I cant really use the same response "I think your thesis statement is really good! They compare and contrast nicely, and they can easily support the topic!" on two different thesis statements.

Answer 20

rephrase it

Answer 21

for example...

Answer 22

Wow i love the words you used. They really....

Answer 23

Can you please stop putting everything in separate responses.. Its annoying to scroll up and down to read all of them.

Answer 24

Ill work with what you gave me. Thank you.

Answer 25

oops, sorry for the inconvenience. Anyways good luck :)!

Answer 26

Would you mind helping with another one?

Answer 27

sure, also would you mind also looking at my question :)

Answer 28

Sorry but I haven't read Macbeth since my junior year in high school. Which was about 3 years ago.

Answer 29

i havent read it all, the point is to decipher the excerpt o3o

Answer 30

it at all*

Answer 31

Anywas, you are being asked to choose one and provide it with other ideas. Or choose two and provide it with ideas?

Answer 32

Choose two

Answer 33

ok lets begin with option three.
This one is quite simple. Just provide other ideas. so...
The kindle runs on electricity, meaning it must be charged. This also raises your electric bill, and if by chance it dies, u can not read.
a pro is that it can contain multiple thousand page books with out needing to strain your back.

Answer 34

next lets go with option 2.
For this one lets offer a completly new idea. Instead of it being love rollercoasters vs. love rollercosters, lets offer the idea of fear of love vs. fear of a roller coaster, or love a roller coaster vs. loving someone.
similarities
-people may be afraid of it not ending well
-they love it but end up having to part ways
-it may be fun at first till you find out it isnt as safe as you had hoped it would be.

contrast
-roller coasters are more thrilling
- you have no controll about what a roller coaster does
-etc.

Answer 35

I used an informal tone, if you are turning this in specially to a professor make sure to revise the punctuation.

Answer 36

as well as the grammar, more "powerful" and "impact full" words can be used than the ones i have provided.

Answer 37

Im posting these under their thesis statements. So other students and my professor will see it.. I dont think I can change her ideas like that with the love roller coaster.

Answer 38

The first one for number 3 is good.

Answer 39

No... don't change the thesis. Change what i said. I used basic words. Wowing the professor with college grammar can earn his favoritism. This is beneficial in future cases, for example if you are late or don't turn something in on time.

Answer 40

Anyways i must go, i have to do research to find out the answer to my question.