Question

New chapter in my book opinions and critics encouraged

Chapter isnt finished lol this is just the beginning

Answer 1

Growing up however wasn’t exactly easy. From the view point of a tower, my world was seemingly perfect. I had a roof over my head and a great family. Looks are always deceiving. My frustrations began with something as simple as the alphabet; easily taught to most kids, but for me, I found it nearly impossible. Eventually, my mom painted it around my closet doors and we sang the alphabet every night. I found it difficult to retain this information.
Battle 1: Learning

Eventually I started pre-school and I was behind everyone else. Now this wasn’t a huge deal because a lot of kids are behind at this age and they catch up. I don’t remember pre-school being hard. I remember trying to fit in. I was a stickler for rules and sometimes kids didn’t like that, but I also thought differently. I was the kid who liked to watch the clouds and catch grasshoppers. Whenever I played house I had an entire plot set up and the dialogue in my head had to be word for word when it came to playing or it wasn’t any fun. Needless to say I preferred playing by myself.

Answer 2

@YanaSidlinskiy @AnimalLover8 @sugarplum15

Answer 3

Sounds very interesting to be honest. I think there should be a semi-colon between the words "in my head" and add in it and put a semi colon there so it could be read as:
"Whenever I played house I had an entire plot set up and the dialogue in my head; it had to be word for word when it came to playing or it wasn’t any fun."

Answer 4

@YanaSidlinskiy thank you i will add that right now

Answer 5

No problem!:)

Answer 6

This is very good. I agree with YanaSidlinskiy that a semicolon after "in my head" would make the story flow better but either way is correct. As a published author, I can say that this is rather interesting. The character (or yourself, if it is not fiction) is relatable to many and has his/her distinct character. From what I have read of this, it intrigues me and makes me want to read more. Great job.

Answer 7

@jossyrose thank you so much im glad you liked it