Question

Can someone please rewrite this introduction for me

Answer 1

Boom, boom, boom your heart is pounding faster than lightning drowning out the cheering people chanting your name. College athletes are considered to be amateurs but does this mean they should not get paid? All college athletes should get paid for their hard work, dedication, and sacrifices. Sacrifices such as their grades and not being able to get a job to support themselves, due to their lack of time

Answer 2

ill try but i have a question Why did you start of like that if your talking abut college players getting paid

Answer 3

??

Answer 4

I'll help, let me finish this assignment (i'm almost done) then i'll start helping you. :)

Answer 5

ok thank you

Answer 6

because they wanted a hook and thats all i could think of

Answer 7

Boom, boom, boom your heart is pounding faster than lightning drowning out the cheering people chanting your name. College athletes are considered to be amateurs but does that mean they should not get paid? All college athletes should get paid for their hard work, dedication, and sacrifices. Sacrifices such as their grades and not being able to get a job to support themselves, due to their lack of time. Their also bring in money to pay off the stadium.

Answer 8

can i change the hook

Answer 9

yes

Answer 10

you didn't rewrite any of it except like the last sentence which doesn't even make since? @hype.child

Answer 11

@isabellewaab can you help

Answer 12

I didn't rewrite anything because it good and just need a better hook

Answer 13

true ;)