Question

can someone plz look at my essay

Answer 1

kk

Answer 2

here you go

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what do you want to know about it cause its really good

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plz look at my grammar and spelling mistake

Answer 5

kk

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and look at my sentence structure is it making scence or not

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it has good structure and a helpful hint for second-guessing yourself w/ spelling simple just look it up

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Im correcting sentence structure now. What is 'maladies'?

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oh yeah it be the malaria disease

Answer 10

So is it supposed to be there?

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Maybe use abnormalities instead.

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yeah it was has to be there because smoke also effects the malaria disease

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@Whitelynx ok but what about the whole essay is it look good or

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Overall, the essay is pretty dang good. You have good, structured paragraphs, and pretty sound arguments. Occasionally your sentences are confusing though. For instance: "such as people smoking last for five years will damage their respiratory system" is bad grammar. what should we replace it with?

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Your essay structure as a whole is pretty clean too.

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@Whitelynx do you want me to delete that sentence

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No. I think we should change it.

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how??

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any idea?

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Ill put corrections in red. Ill send it to you soon. I barely changed the sentence.

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Just give me a bit.

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ok fine

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"cigar smokers who inhale" I think we should get rid of "who inhale" but I'm not actually going to take anything like that out incase you want to leave it. Im just going to strikethrough it.

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Actually, I'll underline stuff I'm not sure about. Anything that you should get rid of will be strikethroughed

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ok fine

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wait are you goona send me the document or what

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Yeah. Sorry its taking so long. Im being careful with my check.

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no worry its fine and by the way thnx for helping and giving ur time

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No problem bro. You ended one of your paragraphs with "Compared to non-smokers, cigar smokers who inhale deeply." which is an incomplete sentence.

Answer 30

Dued wanna know a good site
??

Answer 31

good site for what

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http://www.reverso.net/spell-checker/english-spelling-grammar/ take chunks and paste it in and check it works!!

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to check grammar and punctuation

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is it free

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ok thnx

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yes :) fan and medal for help in future to I'm good at science

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o and math but more science guy :)

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@Whitelynx are you still here

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yes I'm back

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o need help or naw from me??

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You should indent the first line of each new paragraph

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what you mean by indent

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indent=type tab

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dued let me see the paper?

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Attach Brb

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ok bck let see

Answer 47

wen i click it nothing pops up for me but on the top is says "Untitled"

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" In some caught smoke also help the elders because" what do you mean?

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is one is better

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yes and indent 1st line

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Example of indentation:
(click tab here)Smoking cigarettes should be made illegal in Canada. According to the Health Canada, Cigarette smoke kills over 37,000 people in Canada each year. That's more than the amount of all murders, alcohol-related deaths, car accidents and suicides. The inquiry has also shown that, in 2002, about 17% of deaths were due to smoking (20% in males and 12% in females).

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what you mean click tab here

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on your key board thats how you indent

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do you have a google dox account

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I can correct it on that easy

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yeah i do

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ok paste it on a google dox and then make it by sharing it and make the link public,everyone can view then paste like in the box

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here 1 sec

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https://docs.google.com/a/bsd220.org/document/d/1W7MXNXQgARadFdWoz9nJc40KmvIrG5kD3M22B4A8UVc/edit?usp=sharing

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Aye. Finished corrections. here.

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ODP9AT8P3PKCWzmFxJqW8A0mbUHpvzQew1-Flv5zNmU/edit

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i don't think u got all of them-_-

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Does your teacher require mla format? If so, you need to re-do your bibliography portion so that it includes all the necessary information

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MTALH got to this link >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> https://docs.google.com/document/d/1W7MXNXQgARadFdWoz9nJc40KmvIrG5kD3M22B4A8UVc/edit?usp=sharing

Answer 65

I have to sleep now. I got almost all of your mistakes. Red is my corrections red with a line is stuff you should delete, and red with underlined is stuff I'm not sure of. The others can help with the rest. Night!

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White r u sure you got everything

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@Whitelynx i can't open ur document thou

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Almost positive. Go over it again though. his last paragraphs were choppy, so I did a lot there.

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Read second sentence-_-

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Meh. Go over it. Night.

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MTH r u on this link ?

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Night Bruh

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yes i am

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ok just look how i correct it ok?

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ok fine

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hey can u chat so i can ask you some questions

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ok

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smoke?

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wat?

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kills? or killed Ps when I ask u a question go back to the doc to see what I'm asking you ok?

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idk i will say killed

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what you think

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killed sounds right

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bruh i need to hurry ok it almost midnight need to sleep

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ok i know i also have to go

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lets do it

Answer 87

what is yello fever

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nvm do u know what tar is

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oh yeah i know

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the black thing in the ciagrees

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right

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Yh

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its be tar not ta