Question

Can someone please help me with an essay?

Answer 1

Write a persuasive essay of at least five paragraphs about how you would acquire a dog. State where you would adopt your dog from—either from a breeder, an animal shelter, or a rescue group. Explain why you have decided to use this method of pet adoption. Explain the benefits of this resource over the others, but acknowledge differing opinions. Be sure to use information in your essay from the passages you have read.

(a) Write a cohesive argument of at least five paragraphs. (intro, 3 body paragraphs, conclusion)

(b) Take a stand on the best way to acquire a dog.

(c) Explain the best place to adopt a dog from, why this is the right method of pet adoption, and the benefits of this resource over the others.

(d) Organize your essay in order of importance or logical order.

(e) Use relevant evidence from the texts you have read as well as your own ideas to introduce your claim and acknowledge alternate or opposing claims.

(f) Support your position about pet adoption with logical reasoning and relevant evidence.

(g) Use appropriate transitions between sentences and paragraphs to create cohesion and clarify the relationships among ideas and concepts.

(h) Use precise language to explain your stand.

(i) Provide a strong concluding statement to your essay.

Answer 2

this is what i have all ready wrote
Dear Mom,



Can I please get a dog I will take care of it by feeding it dog food, giving it water, bathing it, & taking it out to let it go to the bathroom. I would want to get a dog from the shelter because they don't treat the dogs nicely because they put them asleep & it helps the dog there by giving them a family and a loving home. And plus there are dogs that were abused so I would want to help one by getting it.

Answer 3

and sadly there are no passages

Answer 4

What grade are you in? :)

Answer 5

6th

Answer 6

Alright. So the instructions specifically state you need to have at least five paragraphs. An introduction, three body paragraphs, and a conclusion. So to start we need to develop a strong introduction! I'll help you through all of this :)

Answer 7

ok thank you

Answer 8

and i think i have done a introduction witch is: Dear Mom, Can I please get a dog I will take care of it by feeding it dog food, giving it water, bathing it, & taking it out to let it go to the bathroom. I would want to get a dog from the shelter because they don't treat the dogs nicely because they put them asleep & it helps the dog there by giving them a family and a loving home. And plus there are dogs that were abused so I would want to help one by getting it.

Answer 9

You have a good start, but you can cut out the first bit because the essay isn't about convincing your parents to let you get a dog. The essay is about how you would acquire a dog from one of the listed locations. It wants you to discuss the benefits of the location you chose, and why you chose that location.

Answer 10

ok which is the shelter

Answer 11

Yep! A good outline to start with would be:

A. Introduction
B. Where you would get the dog (Give details!)
C. Why you would get your dog from there (Tell why this is the best method of adoption)
D. Benefits this location, and of other locations as well (Explain why yours is better)
E. Conclusion

Answer 12

With each letter being a new paragraph :)

Answer 13

and btw my essay is DUE tomorrow

Answer 14

Don't worry, I'll help you finish it today!

Answer 15

thanks and so A through E right

Answer 16

Yep! Let's start with building a solid introduction that'll grab your instructor's attention!

Answer 17

a breeder would be cool but you might not really want the affects of the two dogs mixed

Answer 18

a rescue group does rescue dogs but they might have scars and booboos and so you might have to pay for all of the expenses

Answer 19

Let's focus on the introduction at the moment. You're using the shelter as your location, so a starting sentence may be, "Animal shelters are the best place to adopt a dog."

Answer 20

and this the introduction now: I want to get a dog I will take care of it by feeding it dog food, giving it water, bathing it, & taking it out to let it go to the bathroom. I would want to get a dog from the shelter because they don't treat the dogs nicely because they put them asleep & it helps the dog there by giving them a family and a loving home. And plus there are dogs that were abused so I would want to help one by getting it.

Answer 21

Animal shelters are the best place to adopt a dog because there are dogs that were abused so I would want to help one by getting it. They don't treat the dogs nicely because they put them asleep. It helps the dog there by giving them a family and a loving home.

Answer 22

Let's analyze this...
"I want to get a dog I will take care of it by feeding it dog food, giving it water, bathing it, & taking it out to let it go to the bathroom. I would want to get a dog from the shelter because they don't treat the dogs nicely because they put them asleep & it helps the dog there by giving them a family and a loving home. And plus there are dogs that were abused so I would want to help one by getting it."

First of all, you can go ahead and delete this first bit. We're not trying to convince your parents to let you get a dog, so this information is unnecessary.

"I would want to get a dog from the shelter because they don't treat the dogs nicely because they put them asleep & it helps the dog there by giving them a family and a loving home. And plus there are dogs that were abused so I would want to help one by getting it."

Also, you don't need this much information in your introduction. These are good details you can use in your paragraphs later, to convince people that shelters are the best. Your introduction doesn't have to be long and have a ton of details, just start out by telling people what your essay is going to be about!

Answer 23

Ooh, the second one is good!

Answer 24

so can I keep the second one

Answer 25

"Animal shelters are the best place to adopt a dog because there are dogs that were abused so I would want to help one by getting it. They don't treat the dogs nicely because they put them asleep. It helps the dog there by giving them a family and a loving home."

Let's just fix some grammar here...

"Animal shelters are the best place to adopt a dog because there are dogs that were abused. I would want to help one by getting it. They don't treat the dogs nicely because they put them to sleep. It helps the dog there by giving them a family and a loving home."

Answer 26

ok

Answer 27

Now we need a good first paragraph. Looking at the outline I made earlier...this would be about "Where you would get the dog." For this paragraph, tell me more about the shelters. Give me details and facts about them.

Answer 28

Don't worry yet about telling me why you would get the dog there! We'll get to that in the next paragraph :)

Answer 29

in paragraph 1 or 2

Answer 30

Your first paragraph is your introduction. The second is "Where you would get the dog."

Answer 31

the animal shelter

Answer 32

Can you tell me some more details? I'll start you out...

"At the animal shelters, dogs..."

How are the dogs treated? What is their living space like? What are they fed? How long do they stay there before they are put to sleep?

Answer 33

they are treated badly because they don't care about them. there living space is small but big anouff to move around a little bit. they are fed low-quality food. they stay there for 72 hours ( 3 days).

Answer 34

hello

Answer 35

Sorry, I'm working on an essay of my own while helping you.
Good start! Let's develop that into a good paragraph now :)

Answer 36

like this : They are treated badly because they don't care about them. There living space is small but big anouff to move around a little bit. They are fed low-quality food. they stay there for 72 hours ( 3 days).

Answer 37

Good! How about some better words and better sentence fluency (how the paragraph flows).

"At animal shelters, dogs are treated horribly because the volunteers don't care about them. Their living space is cramped and barely big enough to move around. The food is low-quality and cheap. Dogs last seventy-two hours, or three days, before they are either adopted or put to sleep."

Answer 38

ok

Answer 39

Now we can work on the third paragraph, C. Why you would get your dog from there (Tell why this is the best method of adoption). For this one, tell reasoning behind you choice. Why is this where you would get your dog? Why do you believe it is best?

Answer 40

Make sure to start it with a strong transition!

Answer 41

Because you would be preventing the dog from being put to sleep

Answer 42

thats all i have for that part

Answer 43

More details can never hurt :) So you're saving the dog from death, giving it a better home, giving it a chance at life, granting it happiness, making room for the shelter to give space to other animals, drawing attention to the shelter by telling others of your adoption (Possibly getting others to adopt too!), and you're supporting the shelter so maybe it can create better living for the animals while they're there.

Answer 44

ok is that paragraph 3

Answer 45

Yes, that would be details for "C. Why you would get your dog from there (Tell why this is the best method of adoption)"

Answer 46

because you want to love the dog, give a home to the dog, and make the dog happy

Answer 47

Can you work those details, along with some that I mentioned, into a paragraph? A paragraph is three or more sentences :)

Answer 48

Because you want to love the dog, give a home to the dog, and make the dog happy. You're supporting the shelter so maybe it can create better living for the animals while they're there. And by drawing attention to the shelter by telling others of your adoption.

Answer 49

"Because you want to love the dog, give a home to the dog, and make the dog happy. You're supporting the shelter so maybe it can create better living for the animals while they're there. And by drawing attention to the shelter by telling others of your adoption."

Good rule of thumb, never start sentences with "because" unless they're complex sentences. Otherwise they're typically a fragment. A better way to start this would be:

"It is good to adopt from animal shelters because you are saving the dog from the conditions they are living in. You want the dog to experience love, have a home, and be happy. You're also supporting the shelter, which could help it create a better place to live for the other animals while they're there. Adopting from the shelter can draw attention to it as well, by telling others of your adoption."

Answer 50

ok

Answer 51

"Animal shelters are the best place to adopt a dog because there are dogs there that were abused. I would want to help a dog by adopting it. They don't treat the dogs nicely because they put them to sleep. It helps the dog by giving them a family and a loving home.

At animal shelters, dogs are treated horribly because the volunteers don't care about them. Their living space is cramped and barely big enough to move around. The food is low-quality and cheap. Dogs last seventy-two hours, or three days, before they are either adopted or put to sleep.

It is good to adopt from animal shelters because you are saving the dog from the conditions they are living in. You want the dog to experience love, have a home, and be happy. You're also supporting the shelter, which could help it create a better place to live for the other animals while they're there. Adopting from the shelter can draw attention to it as well, by telling others of your adoption."

Here's what we have so far! All we need now is the final detail paragraph, and a conclusion paragraph.

Answer 52

ok

Answer 53

D. Benefits this location, and of other locations as well (Explain why yours is better)

In the next paragraph, we need to discuss why it is better to adopt from here vs somewhere else, like a breeder or a rescue group. We'll need lots of details and facts again :)

Answer 54

a breeder would be cool but you might not really want the affects of the two dogs mixer

a rescue group does rescue dogs but they might have scars and boo-boos and so you might have to pay for all of the expenses

Answer 55

mixed

Answer 56

Alright! Let's work those details into a paragraph. Maybe elaborate on them a bit more, including things like how expensive breeders are and how rescue groups you don't know details about the dog.

Answer 57

ok like this: A breeder would be cool but you might not really want the affects of the two dogs mixed but, they are really expensive. A rescue group does rescue dogs but they might have scars and boo-boos and so you might have to pay for all of the expenses but, rescue groups don't know or tell the details about the dog.

Answer 58

Hold on, let me correct some grammar real quick, You don't want run-on sentences :)

"A breeder would be cool but you might not really want the affects of the two dogs mixed. They are also really expensive. A rescue group does rescue dogs but they might have scars and injuries, so you would have to pay for all of the expenses. In addition, rescue groups don't know or tell the details about the dog."

Answer 59

You're doing great so far, now all that's left is the conclusion! Then we'll walk through some revision and proofreading, just to make sure it's perfect, and we'll be done! :)

Answer 60

For the conclusion, you basically restate what you said in the introduction, summarizing what you spoke about in your essay, and leave the reader with something impactful to remember.

Answer 61

ok

Answer 62

"Animal shelters are the best place to adopt a dog because there are dogs there that were abused. I would want to help a dog by adopting it. They don't treat the dogs nicely because they put them to sleep. It helps the dog by giving them a family and a loving home.

At animal shelters, dogs are treated horribly because the volunteers don't care about them. Their living space is cramped and barely big enough to move around. The food is low-quality and cheap. Dogs last seventy-two hours, or three days, before they are either adopted or put to sleep.

It is good to adopt from animal shelters because you are saving the dog from the conditions they are living in. You want the dog to experience love, have a home, and be happy. You're also supporting the shelter, which could help it create a better place to live for the other animals while they're there. Adopting from the shelter can draw attention to it as well, by telling others of your adoption.

A breeder would be cool but you might not really want the affects of the two dogs mixed. They are also really expensive. A rescue group does rescue dogs but they might have scars and injuries, so you would have to pay for all of the expenses. In addition, rescue groups don't know or tell the details about the dog."

Here's your complete essay so far :)

Answer 63

like this

Answer 64

This is a great map to use for planning an essay, but we already almost completed your essay! You are welcome to map out what we have though :)

Answer 65

I'm not that much of a writing person

Answer 66

It's alright! Just type out a conclusion you think would work :)

Answer 67

like: This is why I want to get a dog from an animal shelter.

Answer 68

I'm sorry my dear, I lost connection for a while and OpenStudy refused to load for me. Do you still need assistance writing your conclusion and revisiting your essay? :)