please review this first paragraph of my essay and give me advice on how you would improve it

High school is sometimes reguarded as the gateway to everyones profession. Whether they go to college to further their education or start their career early and skip college. Either way many people during this time are faced with decisions. I have decided for my career that I want to be a lawyer. The struggles and rewards of being a lawyer are shown by: their education, the various career paths, and their work.

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please review this first paragraph of my essay and give me advice on how you would improve it

High school is sometimes reguarded as the gateway to everyones profession. Whether they go to college to further their education or start their career early and skip college. Either way many people during this time are faced with decisions. I have decided for my career that I want to be a lawyer. The struggles and rewards of being a lawyer are shown by: their education, the various career paths, and their work.

brandon554 · Answer

it is allowed to be in first person
and anything else is probably not allowed

brandon554 · Answer

@BelleCarroll1996

anonymous · Answer

what kind of decisions? why you want to be a lawyer? then you are good.

brandon554 · Answer

this is an opening statement I go on to explain all of that should I have put it in the first paragraph as an introduction?

brandon554 · Answer

@BelleCarroll1996

anonymous · Answer

okay