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Pemadince

(Ha ah ah ah ah ah)

You came looking for safety, shelter, and life.
You came to see your lord and savior.
But all that is here is me.

I am the angel of death, the dark Messiah, your reaper.
I am the Grim Reaper, the soul collector, the eater of soul's.

My minion's of hell will conquer your petty world.
They will devour soul's, possess people's bodies and feed me their fear.

The fear in which consumes you. As you feel your insides slowly disappearing. Your soulless eye's, your body paralyzed.
Crying out to your lord, begging him to forgive your petty sin's.

But it's to late, I have heard your shreaks of fear and I am coming for your soul's.

(Ha Ha Ha Ha Ha)

*Chorus*

You look at me,
But don't you see?
The evil's within,
Trying to hold back my sin's.
The wrong things I did,
And the thing's I hid.
Hope you understand
It wasn't my plan,
To murder them.
It Was The Evil Within.

The first to go is the animal's, and the criminal's.
The next is the military, they will fight but will soon become submissive.
The last is the poor and the rich. They will be the easiest.

You call me a Monster, but I am truly a Hero.
You call me a Demon, but I am truly an Angel.
I am doing God a favor in wiping out what you mortals call humanity.

(Ha ah ah ah ah ah ah ah ah ah)

I am the beast you hear of in church. I am your conqueror, the collector, your cause of fear.
I slay those un-worthy of life.
I thrive on your fear, I am a war monger.
I am the king of destruction and the god of death.
I am A.G the Grim Reaper.


Welcome to my lair,
I hope your scared.
When the sky goes dark,
and that feeling comes in.
You'll be feeling my wrath,
as it burn's your skin.
Can you feel me raising in deeper now?

*Chorus*

Now burn!
I hope you cry,
now burn!
Don't be scared cause you'll die,
now burn!
Welcome to my raising lair of death!!

(Ha ha ha)


WELCOME TO HELL!!!


Does this sound any good, i need help with lyrics

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@ayeedomo @quin100

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yes!1/

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can you help me with more lyrics

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ill try

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thanks

Answer 6

it sounds amazing!

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thanks

Answer 8

It's cool cx

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yea but i need a lot more lyrics, a drum cover, bass cover, and vocalist for it, its supposed to be a metal song

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im stuck on lyrics XD

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so am i i cant think of anymore lol

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The fear in which consumes you. As you feel your insides slowly disappearing. Your eyes soulless, your body paralyzed.

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Idk, I tried XD

Answer 14

well dang lol i didn't think of that

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lol ur good tho

Answer 16

Crying out loud, asking your lord to forgive your sins. But it's too late? This is a very intense song man XD

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IKR

Answer 18

Dude, it's so hard to find lyrics that matched the rest of the song cause everything just sounds too preppy. XD

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what do you mean they sound to preppy? lol do you mean creepy?

Answer 20

this one?

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yea

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think you can help?

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ill c wat i can do i promise

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ok thanx

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um i can put a little twisted part that i have at home but its a really dark verse

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the darker the better

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wait that sounded a bit racist XD my bad

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hahaha yup ur so weird lol but hey everyone is a bit racist in their life no?

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true srry everyone for the racism

there problem solved, i think

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hahahaha apology accepted

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yay

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lol

Answer 33

i still cant think of anymore lyrics

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dont worry i'll tell u tomorrow

Answer 35

ok well i wont get it til tuesday

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y

Answer 37

No I mean lyrics trying to go with the lyrics you already have. Everything I come up with sounds to preppy for this song XD

Answer 38

i got one but idk so here it is

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you look at me
but dont you see
the evils within
trying to hold back my sins
the wrong things i did
and the things i hid
hope you understand
it wasnt my plan
to murder them
it was the evil within

* dont know if this helps but a promise is a promise

Answer 40

it helps alot thanks

Answer 41

Wow, it's really good!! It's coming along wonderfully XD

Answer 42

thanks

Answer 43

What @karrie631 came up with should be the chorus.

Answer 44

omg you used my lyrics awe

Answer 45

well yea your lyrics are awesome @bringmetherain is right to

Answer 46

actually you guys are right, since its only a short part

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Plus it has a nice ring to it. XD Cause you know how different parts of a song has a different ring to it? Like a verse in the song differs completely from the chorus of a song. So yeahh

Answer 48

all we need are a lil more lyrics and the bass and drum cover, and a singer XD

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wait @adamgrimm you dont have a band yet?

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nope me and my band broke up months ago when we stopped getting gigs, and when i lost my metal voice

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Are you a guitarist?

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i was a singer

Answer 53

Hmmm. I was gonna say you can make an acoustic version since you lost your metal voice.

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Like first have that done, and then when you get a new band together you guys can create a full band version of it.

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i refuse to make a band with anybody else, only with the people i called my extended family and that wont happen again

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no offense to anybody else tho

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Nah I feel you. I'm in a band with my sisters. Well kind of xD

Answer 58

yea

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haha i have four and i give lessons

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its a big job to do

Answer 61

I would assume so :/ @karrie631

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yea, but a plan on quitting

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why

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@Atsie what do you think?

Answer 65

Hmm, I dunno what to say :P
One things for sure, this is definitely very dark and I can easily tell that your influence of these lyrics is for certain from death metal.
I will say though, that i think you have the beginning off to a good start. I mean when it says "all you have here is me" that has a way of furthering someone to want to know what on earth the rest of the song/lyrics are about.
Switch the wording around here a bit maybe, more so for the fact that it'd rhyme better.
"Your eye's soulless, your body paralyzed."
how bout
"Your soulless eyes, your body paralyzed"

eyes...paralyzed.
I'm sure you see that.

One other thing I will point out is the meaning between your verses and your lines. Your verses are at facevalue to say the least all big talk...your coming for someone's soul...and they fear you, and their insides will slowly disappear and etc, etc.
Then the chorus, you practically make it sound passive. Sorry almost. It doesn't jive to be frank.

Now, I do not listen to metal, but I have heard enough and been around the block lyrically to know that your meanings really really need to match. If your gonna be dark and everything, do not by ANY means say "sorry" for being dark.
Get what I'm sayin?

You asked what I thought. Thats the best I can do. :)

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ok ok thanks and i said sorry for being racist, not dark i love dark and anybody who says that i need to apologize for being to dark can shutup its what i am XD

Answer 67

thanks for the advice though

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im quitting cuz im moving to a higher step in d-jaying

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ah i see

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you D-jay

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I wanna learn how to remix music but idk.

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@Trevor12

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???

Answer 74

@teresar7 , @Qwertty123 , this song

Answer 75

IT is very interesting. i would love to hear it being sung. would u record yourself singing it, or the rythem please? rythem is a big part of a song. i have been writing songs since i was 6 and im now 17 1/2 keep up the good work

Answer 76

well i cant sing anymore and i cant find a band to do it for me so idk what to do

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if i could find a band, i would do a cover for it. i need a band tho..

Answer 78

if i could find one, would you let me do a cover s long as i write down how u made it?

Answer 79

sure why not

just dont steal my idea if it become's a hit lol

Answer 80

hey you can keep this as proof that its all yours :)

Answer 81

lol ok go for it

Answer 82

is there a way i can contact you on gmail or something so i can suggest more ideas for the song or something?

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do u have fb

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yes.

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just let me know who u r when u message or add me

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@jamye

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NANANANA NANANANA BATMAN! (lol)

I think the song is good :)
I don't know what to suggest though because I'm terrible at writing lyrics XD

Answer 88

Nice job!

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@quin100

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nice love it

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thanks just a few more lyrics and im done, and then that leaves the band

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yay

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if a famous band were to sing it who do u think should sing it

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really

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ice cube

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@Qwertty123