does the vocabulary in the sentence make sense?

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anonymous · Answer

Children at a young age work avidly on the things they enjoy and thus, endeavoring in their favorite subject; even more so, if the parents were to compel them to work on their weaknesses, rather than only their strength.

serenity74 · Answer

Compel them to work? I am not sure if that works in this sentence. 
Also, please post your questions in the english section you posted it in the math section. Sorry if I came off rude but I don't want you to get in trouble for no reason. Thank you and have a lovely Sunday :)

faiqraees · Answer

encourage them to work, motivates them to work

anonymous · Answer

it's fine. lol i just need to use vocabuolary that's why i used avidly, endeavor and compel. I didn't even notice where i posted it sorry.

anonymous · Answer

okay thank you! is everything else okay in the sentence?

serenity74 · Answer

Yea I think everything else is ok and lol it's okay! :)

welshfella · Answer

'endeavouring in'  sounds a bit odd I think . Perhaps ' Endeavouring to achieve something' is better.

mathmale · Answer

There are several glaring grammatical errors in this paragraph, besides the odd word usage mentioned by others.

Read each sentence to yourself and decide whether the words and sentences make sense to you.