Question

Can you review this poem?

Answer 1

The Carnal Gentleman

Gentle yet animalistic
his tendencies lie
Ideas are narcissistic
And yet they still thrive

Perfect in looks
Yet Carnal in thought
The gentleman took
It was all for nought

His emotions were gray
And whatever he says
Is hollow and dead
His heart is black with a hint of red

But the red is worse than the monster he is
For it consumes the emotions of all around
To damage to burn and to destroy,
the Carnal Gentleman enjoys

For monsters may run and people may hide
but the emotions inside
Are always there
To destroy and create while
the Carnal Gentleman waits. :)

Answer 2

@jabez177

Answer 3

@abbycross167

Answer 4

@batmano3

Answer 5

@CandyCove

Answer 6

Holy crap this is really good love!

Answer 7

XD really?

Answer 8

I thought i messed up because the rhyme scheme is off

Answer 9

lol no it should be a rap honsestly or a song

Answer 10

I'm not a native speaker but this poem is lyrical and really resonates with me. I think batmano3 is right - you should publish this. Just a little thing: the last two lines read better (in rhyme) when you change it like this:
"To destroy and create
while the Carnal Gentleman waits." Good stuff!