My new poem:

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My new poem:

hope210 · Answer

Bring me home,
where the light still shines,
where your loving arms await for my arrival;
You determine my survival,

hope210 · Answer

if you have any ideas on things to add to it, it will help.

kelsey.benton00 · Answer

I like the words and the meaning they hold, if you could extend it and maintain the overall message, it'd be really good (: It's really good as it is, just a bit short. And the first two lines, because they don't rhyme, kind of contradict the last two, as far as meter goes, but maybe that's intentional.

youngstudier · Answer

Nicely done, @Hope210 ^.^

briannaontimeforreal · Answer

i like it

hannahsalvo · Answer

ABCC rhythms are very hard to make sound smooth with only 4 lines. It has a nice meaning but I would suggest modifying it to create a different rhythm OR adding to it! Good job though!

afloridagirl · Answer

i believe it was amazing, it had strong words that made it interesting

briannaontimeforreal · Answer

i liked it you did a great job

atsie · Answer

This is lovely @Hope210 .
You ought to add some more to it to make it even more special! ^.^

hope210 · Answer

Thank you all for your help, and I'm adding more to it today :)