Poem I have been working on... a little feedback please?

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nightcorenikki · Answer

Broken and fixated on that single concept
A heart crying out to feel a touch of happiness
But afraid of the sting of inevitable truth
Tossing aside notions of care to torments of words
Warnings of care turn to burdens of mind
The right choice turned so wrong by the thoughts
Fear outlives and overpowers the heart so much
"It's a joke" means one "Are you stupid?" means another
"I just don't want you to get hurt" are the literal words
Binding a hope in so much fear they fear to hope
"It must be a joke" the mind agrees so depressed
"For no one could truly care, not for one like me."
As it repeats and replays in those worrisome thoughts
But overridden with guilt for these doubts so strong
In the end pain will come, it always does so
So please stop reminding my brain so I may enjoy now.


{plus, I have no idea what to title it}

heyitsmeh · Answer

Its really good, I feel the pain of it, You should title something to do with the heart just of how it really feels but as I can see right now Everythingis perfect

youngstudier · Answer

*^* Beautifully written

nightcorenikki · Answer

thanks heyitsmeh and YoungStudier, it's one of my favorites that I've written recently so I'm glad you like it ^.^

addy · Answer

This is beautifully written. If you're still trying to come up with a title, it sorta reminds me of a glass heart. It is truely beautiful. Keep up the amazing writing!

nightcorenikki · Answer

Thanks Addy, and i kind of like the glass heart idea... i might have to think about that.

head22 · Answer

its very good