This is a poem I am writing so it isn't finished yet but I would love some feedback:) please

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hope210 · Answer

And the angels cried
When the innocents died
no body was to blame,
except the ones who took them away,
We all hurt, cause they were killed like
they had no worth
they were taken away, like they weren't
here in the first place,

(That's all I have so far)

hope210 · Answer

@Atsie  @YoungStudier

youngstudier · Answer

*^* I love it. I'd also love to see what else you have in store for this :)

atsie · Answer

This sounds like a reference to the latest shootings that have taken place in America. Am I right, or does it talk of something else? @Hope210 
So far I like it though. ^.^

hope210 · Answer

You are right @Atsie is has to do with the shootings

atsie · Answer

I thought so. Its sad the way things are turning today. :/ I've written a lot about it myself.

hope210 · Answer

Yea its sad :(

hope210 · Answer

Here is the rest of the poem :

Families broken, shattered like glass,
cause of a hate no one could get past
we pray for peace, but we have to many enemies, 
  domestic and foreign countries,
we weep at God's feet, as the angels cry,
for the innocents who die.

atsie · Answer

Very well written indeed and all of it so true. I honestly am not even part of those people who were shot, but I feel broken myself. Like for their families, and for the country. 
Thank you for writing this though. It's an eye opener to those who shut their eyes purposely in order to stay happy.

hope210 · Answer

Thanks @Atsie it means alot. :)

atsie · Answer

You're so welcome :)

yaymac · Answer

I love the realistic imagery of this piece, and the raw subject that is currently extremely relevant. However, you could really strength this piece by removing the word like, generally it makes your statement seem weak and questionable, instead it would be better to make a blunt statement.

hope210 · Answer

@yaymac Thanks for the advice I might just do that :)

shadowlegendx · Answer

A good way to say "like" in poems, is "almost as if"

Instead of comparing...allude to it

hope210 · Answer

@ShadowLegendX thank you I'll try that next time :)

shadowlegendx · Answer

No problem :)