A student wrote the following sentence:

Pearl is described as an "elf-child," a "sprite," and "the "embodiment of the warfare of Hester's spirit." All of these descriptions mark Pearl as enchanting but also strange and obviously creepy.

What change would make this sentence more objective?

Question

A student wrote the following sentence:

Pearl is described as an "elf-child," a "sprite," and "the "embodiment of the warfare of Hester's spirit." All of these descriptions mark Pearl as enchanting but also strange and obviously creepy.

What change would make this sentence more objective?

katecc379 · Answer

What change would make this sentence more objective?
Change "obviously creepy" to "unsettling."
Change "obviously creepy" to "poorly behaved."
Change "enchanting" to "cruel."
Change "enchanting" to "potentially evil."

confluxepic · Answer

Objective writing cannot vary while subjective writing can vary and even be proven wrong. Objective writing is more factual.
"Potentially evil" is not factual.
"Poorly behaved" is vague.
"Unsettling" varies from person to person based on what a person finds unsettling.

"Cruel" is concise and straightforward. I'd go with that. @katecc379

katecc379 · Answer

Ok thanks do you think b for this?

katecc379 · Answer

@Confluxepic