Question

My new poem!!

Answer 1

Where was the warning?
Where was the truth?
where was presence when I needed you?
Where was the comfort you gave to everyone else,
Where was lent hands when I begged for help,
Where were you whilst I was trapped by myself,
Why didn't you assist me while I tried to fix me,
Why didn't you love me like you would anybody else?
Why didn't you hug me when I was crying alone,
What were you doing when you wouldn't pick up the phone?
were you ignoring me or did you have to much to do,
didn't have time for me to talk to you,
What were you thinking when you got the call last Friday
afternoon?
When the cops gave you that dreadful news.

Answer 2

I would love to hear what you think about it. :)

Answer 3

@Atsie

Answer 4

It's a amazing poem it's really sad at the end but almost every girl can relate to this poem expect for the end i hope i really like the poem keep up the good work tho :)

Answer 5

I don't know if I am merely speculating, but I sense that this is half written from a perspective of a girl who's already dead. The perspective of a girl wondering what the person she loves most is thinking now that she's gone.
I can only speculate because most times it's a foolish action to perceive the mind of another writer as it can a 100% turn out to be something else or a complete opposite rather. But I also feel ambitious when I look at the meaning of something. :)
Either way, Hope, I really like what you have written here though. I think you ended it perfectly which leaves me thinking (as it should with any reader) what its about. It's relatable in some sense even if its written about something or someone else and all of the lines that you have written in the form of a question, I've found myself asking those in different circumstances to. I think you did a good job on rhyming, like far better than any other rhyming that I've seen you do which also adds to the simple but effective transition from writer to reader.
It is indeed sad as was previously stated, but I love sadness in a poem. I love things that mess with my emotions and ruffle me all up inside and that make me think. And I love things that make my heart palpitate in happiness and joy. All ways, either way, everything. Keep writing about it all @Hope210 and never stop! The world needs more people like you! ♥

Answer 6

@Atsie Thank you it means alot :) @Mahoganie.Carson Thanks for the compliment

Answer 7

You're welcome :)

Answer 8

My pleasure! @Hope210 ♥