CaN sOmEoNe HeLp Me ReViSe A pOeM i JuSt MaDe?

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4everaddicted2anime · Answer

Only when alone
Following is all I know
Even though religion
May not suit me

Followed a friend
Into her world of Christ
Not knowing I was 
Going to see you

I only went to spend
Valuable time with a friend
But then I saw you
Having a wonderful time

This was our first time
Meeting away from the pool
It greatly surprised me, and
You got to see me fully clothed

otherworldly · Answer

The first stanza needs to be changed a bit thats all great poem @4everaddicted2anime

daddysbabygirl · Answer

*only when im alone
following is all I know
even though religion helps
It still hurts to play the cards I was dealt

I feel that would make your first stanza match the rest of your poem

dallascowboys88 · Answer

It Looks Great To Me, But After You Complete The Mistakes But Besides Those It Looks Great!! GJ :)