Question

This is a poem I just wrote today, So feed back would be nice. :)

Answer 1

Sinner

I'm only a sinner
in the rain
When nobody's left to blame,
I'm only a sinner when it's
pouring down,
and no one's around,
I'm only a sinner when they turn away,
I'm only a sinner in the night of day
when the time comes and I have to pay;
I'm only a sinner when I feel out of
place,
I cry out of pain
can't look myself in the face,
I feel so ashamed,
That I'm only a sinner in the rain.

Answer 2

@Atsie @SapphireMoon @YoungStudier @Yinshy

Answer 3

OMGGGG
I LOVE IT
IT'S SO AWESOME *~*

Answer 4

That was amazing. I could really feel the pain in it (as a good thing).

Answer 5

I agree with @mymusicanthem . I can somehow feel the emotion of the poem you can feel the loneliness and the sadness of it. The repetition of `I am a sinner` really brings that out. And the use of words like `"ashamed, pain, and sinner"` clues into the emotion of the person or the writer of it. Nicely done :)

@Hope210

Answer 6

@Hope210
Oh my goodness, I love the simplicity of the way this is written and yet the grappling affect of how convicting it is! This is definitely something I'd call "an emotion realized."
It hit me really hard personally actually......Thank you so much for tagging me ♥♥

Answer 7

I like it, fully describes the desolation of a life without the knowledge that Someone came to take that pain away. :) @Hope210

Answer 8

@SapphireMoon @Atsie @563blackghost @mymusicanthem @YoungStudier Thank you all for you lovely comments. I'm glad you all like or love it :)

Answer 9

Great Poem, No spelling Errors found.

Answer 10

You're so welcome @Hope210 You're very inspiring yanno ^.^

Answer 11

Thanks @Gamingwolf125

Answer 12

Its great! <3