Can someone check my poem and tell me how I can improve it please:
That’s when the smoke filled my lungs and my eyes started bursting out the tears.
Where the only thing I could think about was how stupid I was to fall into your arms.
How stupid I was to give my all to you.
When you most needed my love I was there, for everything.
Instead of hating you for all the things you asked me to do, I loved you even more.
I loved you insanely without thinking about the worser person you’ve made me become .
Without thinking …
I pleased you with whatever you wanted,
Oh how I pleased you,

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Can someone check my poem and tell me how I can improve it please:
That’s when the smoke filled my lungs and my eyes started bursting out the tears.
Where the only thing I could think about was how stupid I was to fall into your arms.
How stupid I was to give my all to you.
When you most needed my love I was there, for everything.
Instead of hating you for all the things you asked me to do, I loved you even more.
I loved you insanely without thinking about the worser person you’ve made me become . 
Without thinking …
I pleased you with whatever you wanted,
Oh how I pleased you,

wintersuntime · Answer

this is just a part of it Im still not finished

otherworldly · Answer

the beginning needs work and i just feel like u are telling a story but it isnt working out in poem form

otherworldly · Answer

make the lines shorter and use more meaningful words

wintersuntime · Answer

Thank you

atsie · Answer

This appears in more of a lyric form rather than a poetic form.
While poetry has zero limits, there is still to some extent a clean preciseness in a poem that CAN be identified as poem.
Maybe you could study some poems and swing your style or your wording a bit. Let me know if you'd like assistance on this ^.^