Question

I have a post open in Writing and in English, don't wanna close them. So here.

Answer 1

Can someone please read this and check it? Is it good, run on sentences, or even grammar mistakes?

Answer 2

Where are you writing this? Google Docs or Word?

Answer 3

Word.

Answer 4

Ah, okay. The reason I ask is because I often help with peer editing via Google Docs.

We can do it here though.

"Mainly secularism, and rational thought" -> Mainly secularism and rational thought

Comma is unnecessary.

'decided to form an organization' and 'formed a secret group of his own'

This is repetitive.

Capitalize 'Church'

Conflicting thoughts of "the Illuminati was stopped" and "the Illuminati continues to push on." I would suggest hindered, or impeded.

Answer 5

For the last one, the "push on", what do I do?

Answer 6

You say that they were stopped yet in the following paragraph you note that they are pushing on. These thoughts conflict with each other. Change stopped to them being 'hindered' or 'impeded.'

Answer 7

Stopped makes it sound like they were put to rest, or could not move on.

Answer 8

How's that?

Answer 9

Even though he was (impeded/hindered) by (Conservatives/the Church/whoever was criminalizing the group's actions), Weishaupt and the Illuminati continue to push on...

Answer 10

impended-> impeded

Answer 11

yup :)

Answer 12

Those last two, how can I change them? I don't want them to see similar, what other words can I use other than, "Some people believe" and "It is believed"??

Answer 13

.-.

Answer 14

think/thought

Answer 15

For more, I would recommend a thesaurus

Answer 16

Got it.
Thank you. :]
I'll show you my progress in about 2 hours, if you're still here.