Question

Check my work

Answer 1

Instructions: Recall a "first" in life: the birth of your first baby sibling, your first time driving, the first birthday party you remember, or another first. Write two paragraphs that describe this important event, paying particular attention to details and sequencing. Remember that details refer to the facts of observations an author includes or omits. Think of details as specifics. For example, if the author said she drove a Mustang, you wouldn't know much. However, if she said she drove a 1965 candy apple red Mustang convertible with baby soft white seats and polished chrome instruments, you would have a much better idea. Use proper spelling and grammar.

Answer 2

ANSWER:
Through out August i was learning a dance for the first time on my own. I went to my cousin's house to show them and once the dance was over i jumped in the air and landed on my foot just right it broke my fifth metatarsal in my left foot. The break looks like a lightning bolt going through the bone. My foot instantly started to swell and had blue and purple bruises all over my foot. When it happened i heard a crack and fell to the floor instantly and lost the air I'm my lungs for a moment. I didn't cry at first all i was thinking was "i need to get home and see my parents they need to see if this is broken" "i hope there not at work yet". My Aunt took me home and luckily my parents were home.

They took a look at it and said its definitely broken and at that point the pain started to kick in and i started to cry. Once i got to the ER we walked in and i saw something cool. They have machines that you check in with instead of going to the front desk. We waited about 15 minutes and went to a room 13. It made me and my mom laugh because in all her years on working in the hospital she has never seen a room 13. Once the doctor came in and looked at my foot she took a Xray of it and wrapped it in a soft cast for a week. Then i went to a real orthopedic doctor and was told i didn't need a cast and got a hard sole shoe. 4 weeks later i can now walk on my foot but i still need the shoe for a few more weeks to ensure its healed properly.

Answer 3

@Elsa213 what do you think ? e.e

Answer 4

I think i did pretty well for this one on my own

Answer 5

What we should focus on is the dance.

Answer 6

T~T i already submitted it

Answer 7

The prompt is about something you did for the first time.

Did you struggle for weeks?
Were you nervous?

Rip. >.<

Answer 8

I thought u left and you didnt come back so i was like i think i did good

Answer 9

Boiii
QC keeps reloading on me >.<

Answer 10

IM SORRY

Answer 11

I'm sorry. ;-;

Answer 12

its ok i think it will still work

Answer 13

Can you resubmit it?

Answer 14

yes but the multiple choice questions might be different

Answer 15

Aweh v.v

Answer 16

So your telling me to resubmit it

Answer 17

Well if it's on an exam, then it shouldn't affect your grade much. e.e

Answer 18

i got 3 multiple choice questions right out of 4 and then the written one this one

Answer 19

i went in detail and everything i think it will be fine

Answer 20

You needed to focus mostly on the main topic. `The first time you did something`.

You didn't go into much detail with your dance.
You could've explained how you struggled for weeks trying to learn the dance and when your time had come to show your cousin, you shivered with fear of failing or messing up.

You could also explain what you wore on the day of the dance. What did you do on that day?

Answer 21

urmmm elsa i learned the dance in 3 days and broke my foot on the 4th day e.e

Answer 22

i didnt even practice a whole week

Answer 23

You didn't add much detail, though. /.\

Answer 24

*sigh* hold on im gonna have to do the whole test over give me a second

Answer 25

Explain how you felt when learning the dance.
How did you get injured?
How did your dance look?
Did you think you were doing well?

Answer 26

i explained how i got hurt

Answer 27

Did your cousin comment?
What were your thoughts when dancing?

Answer 28

"once the dance was over i jumped in the air and landed on my foot just right it broke my fifth metatarsal in my left foot."

Answer 29

You focused more on the injury rather than the dance.

Answer 30

If you want, you can leave the test the way it is.
I'm just pointing out the things you should mention next time you have to make a prompt.

Answer 31

i already am redoing it and i thought it was about a first time this story is about the first time i broke a bone so i thought i would focus on the injury more than the dance

Answer 32

Breh
I thought it was about the dance. >.<
Rip.

Answer 33

No its about the first time i broke my foot

Answer 34

Rip e.e
Whale, it's fine then. c'x

Answer 35

I HAD TO REDO IT FOR NOTHING T~T

Answer 36

Fien fien
Let's mention the dance then. e.e

Answer 37

TO LATE! I RESUBMITTED ITTTTT!

Answer 38

BREH

Answer 39

/.<

Answer 40

i put a title The first time i broke my foot. By First name, Last name
but i really put my real name

Answer 41

By Toby Smith

Answer 42

x'D thats not my name but sure

Answer 43

I was going to write everything for you and as far as I got was:

`It was a bright sunny morning, the leaves were dancing through the wind. `

Answer 44

I did gewd. e.e
I em proud.

Answer 45

ok ok slow down i just looked and i didnt press the button yet so before i do



is what I wrote good or do i HAVE to add more about the dance


i feel adding the title will show the reader its a story about my foot not the dance

Answer 46

It needs more detail

Answer 47

imma just sit here and wait for you to finish typing before i do anything imma move on to another class dm me when your done typing :3

Answer 48

It was a bright sunny morning, the leaves were swirling through the wind. "Take Four!" shouted Mrs. Henry, the dance teacher. I through a long leap through the air and gracefully landed on the tip of my foot. "Try once more," mentioned Mrs. Henry as she squinted attempting to see me closer. With a fear of messing up, I sprang across the stage.

Suddenly, I heard a snap. It wasn't just any snap. It came from me. Immediately, I lost balance and an uncontrollable pain grew from my foot, up. I couldn't hold my tears back from so much pain; I began gasping for air. Once I entered the ER, I limped in. I signed in using a machine instead of finding the front desk, which I found kind of cool. We waited about 15 minutes and went to a room 13. It made me and my mom laugh because in all her years on working in the hospital she had never seen a "room 13". Once the doctor came in and looked at my foot, took an Xray of it and wrapped it in a soft cast for a week. Then I went to a real orthopedic doctor and was told I didn't need a cast and got a hard sole shoe. After 4 weeks, my foot gained its strength back but still needed the shoe for a few more weeks to ensure it healed properly.

Answer 49

@Elsa213 Better

Answer 50

Throughout August i was learning a dance for the first time on my own. I went to my cousin's house to show them and once the dance was over i jumped in the air and landed on my foot just right it broke my fifth metatarsal in my left foot. The break looks like a lightning bolt going through the bone. My foot instantly started to swell and had blue and purple bruises all over my foot. When it happened i heard a crack and fell to the floor instantly and lost the air I'm my lungs for a moment. I didn't cry at first all i was thinking was "i needed to get home and see my parents they need to see if this is broken" "i hope there not at work yet". My Aunt took me home and luckily my parents were home.

They took a look at it and said it’s definitely broken and at that point the pain started to kick in and i started to cry. Once i got to the ER we walked in and i saw something cool. They have machines that you check in with instead of going to the front desk. We waited about 15 minutes and went to a room 13. It made me and my mom laugh because in all her years on working in the hospital she has never seen a room 13. Once the doctor came in and looked at my foot she took an X-ray of it and wrapped it in a soft cast for a week. Then i went to a real orthopedic doctor and was told i didn't need a cast and got a hard sole shoe. 4 weeks later i can now walk on my foot but i still need the shoe for a few more weeks to ensure it’s healed properly.