Question

Write a Descriptive Essay

Answer 1

@SmokeyBrown

Answer 2

Um.....XD

Answer 3

Are there any instructions?

Answer 4

What do you need @SmokeyBrown to write you a "Descriptive essay" about. Even so, we can't really write full essays for you....i don't know his standards. XD

Answer 5

I am going to now write an essay ...

Answer 6

you write about a person, object, or experience that is important to you

Answer 7

What is important to you, Jason?

Answer 8

Well, thats supposed to be you, then. You can't just write other people's experiences.

Answer 9

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Answer 10

We need to know what the topic is, first of all. Thank you. XD

Answer 11

ALRIGHT I'M GONNA WRITE ABOUT SCHOOL THAT'S MY TOPIC

Answer 12

GREAT!! YOU GOT THIS!! :D

Answer 13

Well, if the topic is finalized, you can close the question, i believe. I don't think you'll need help writing an essay about school. ^^;

Answer 14

Explain why you chose `school` and why it is important to you.

Answer 15

That is, if you still need help doing the assignment.. XD

Answer 16

ok so far imma write my first day as an 11th grader

Answer 17

Good luck! :D

Answer 18

My First day as a 10th Grader


On my first day of School as an 10th Grader, I went to my new school and i saw a lot of new people and started get to know a few people and know where are my classes.

I went to my First class on my schedule which was Math Class along with my other classes such as History, Biology, and English and once i went to Math Class which was Geometry and i went and met my math teacher named Mrs. Wooten. She was very nice to me and then she introduced me to the whole class and everyone was really nice so i thought this would be a good year for mei would like also Mrs. Wooten was willing to teach me about Geometry. Then after my Geometry Class, i went to my other classes and i was so fascinated and intrigued with my classes and everyone in the school.

After, I went to Lunch and i met a few people that were very kind and friendly to be friends with me and i met this one girl that was very nice to me. Her name was Tamera, she was very nice and came to introduce herself to me then we set with each other at lunch and talked about How Do I Like the School and i said I like it it is very decent and everyone is nice to me and we started chatting more about the school and having an intelligent conversation about getting to know one another.

Finally, After me and Tamera were talking throughout the entire day and went to our classes she introduced me to other more students of our school and seemed to have socialized and got to know a lot of new people so i ended up having a good day at my new school then met a lot of my new teachers and students at my new school.

Answer 19

i just write about 10th grader but i'm writing the essay and i'll send it to get your input on it and you can captalize it on the sentences to see what do ya'll think

Answer 20

@SmokeyBrown

Answer 21

The essay sounds pretty good so far. It sounds like you have a pretty interesting experience to talk about, in that you're not only entering the first day of school but are also going to a completely new school.
Of course, meeting new people is a big part of this kind of change, so it makes sense that you focus on that. All in all, it sounds like you've had a pretty positive experience.
I'll not focus too much on the grammar for now. I think it's more important that we develop the essay in terms of what you want to describe, which is your experience.
I think that some description of your own feelings or reactions to the events taking place might make the essay a bit stronger. Other than that, it seems like you've chosen some topics that are important to you, so I'd say this is a good direction.

Answer 22

thank you smoke but doesn't it need a little punctation and a lil change to you ?

Answer 23

on the grammar on it

Answer 24

Yeah, that's true. Mm, I guess it would be ok to make corrections like the following:

On my first day of School as an 10th Grader, I went to my new school. I saw and got to know a lot of new people, and I got to know where my classes are.

I went to my First class on my schedule which was Math Class, along with my other classes such as History, Biology, and English. Once i went to Math Class, which was Geometry I met my first teacher, Mrs. Wooten. She was very nice to me and when she introduced me to the whole class, everyone was really nice so i thought this would be a good year for me. I would like that Mrs. Wooten was willing to teach me about Geometry. Then after my Geometry Class, i went to my other classes. I was so fascinated and intrigued with my classes and everyone in the school.

After classes, I went to Lunch and i met a few people that were very kind and friendly to me. I met one girl that was very nice to me. Her name was Tamera. After she came to introduce herself to me, we sat with each other at lunch and talked about how I liked the new school. I said I like it. It was very decent and everyone was nice to me. We started chatting more about the school and had an intelligent conversation to get to know one another.

Finally, after me and Tamera were talking throughout the entire day and went to our classes she introduced me to other more students of our school. I was able to socialize and got to know a lot of new people, so I ended up having a good day at my new school. Later on, I met a lot of my new teachers and students at my new school.

Answer 25

The main corrections I made were to the run-on sentences, where more than two independent clauses were connected by "and". I just broke those up into separate sentences. Otherwise I think it's pretty good grammar-wise so far.

Answer 26

i'm gonna write your version in better thank you smoke is it fine ?

Answer 27

?

Answer 28

Oh yeah, if you're alright with the wording, I don't mind. Of course, you should feel free to make any adjustments you like as well

Answer 29

k thank you a lot smoke for everything man i appreciate it

Answer 30

Hey no worries, I'm glad to help