Question

Trying to write a paper on what 2 causes were the most significant for the American Revolution but am having trouble narrowing it down to which 2 were the most important. Any ideas?

Answer 1

@lolokrat Is that the exact wording of the prompt?

"What two causes were the most significant for the American Revolution?"

Answer 2

nah let me check

Answer 3

What caused the American Revolution, be very specific and discuss at least two causes.

Answer 4

professor said to pick only 2 and most important

Answer 5

Well the professor said 'the most important,' yet the prompt is more general. What you can do is simply go with two causes that you've already identified then make the argument that they are in fact the most significant.

Answer 6

yeah she said disregard that prompt and be specific with just 2 (cause/effect essay) but i'm having a hard time narrowing them down to the most important 2 haha

Answer 7

Okay, what are you thinking so far then, lay it out for me.

Answer 8

taxation without representation should be 1 i think

Answer 9

Definitely

Answer 10

not sure if i should do protests in boston (boston tea party) or intolerable acts

Answer 11

probably protests since i can write the most about that

Answer 12

I see, that's almost balanced in a way. Taxation without representation as a reason for the American colonies, and the Boston Tea Party protests as a reason for the British (a colony of theirs acting in impunity and defiance).

Answer 13

yeah thats probably best

Answer 14

And since the Intolerable Acts are a byproduct of the Boston Tea Party, there's nothing to stop you from mentioning it as well. Since it's something the British Parliament did to further the divide.

Answer 15

oo yeah ill do that

Answer 16

hey thanks you helped me make up my mind

Answer 17

maybe ill post it later when im done

Answer 18

No problem dude. This sounds like a fun essay to write. I think you got it in the bag.

Answer 19

Sounds good.

Answer 20

sweet thanks

Answer 21

You're most welcome

Answer 22

@Shadow

Answer 23

I'm kind of reading this intermittently through some League matches so bear with me

Answer 24

"The American Revolution shaped the way our country functioned in many ways, ranging from political to social realms. "

I feel like this sentence could flow better by ending with something like "ranging from politics to society at large."

'political' to 'social' realms feels like odd words that create a slow flow in the first sentence of your essay. Your hook.

Answer 25

" But looking further than that - down to the very root of our prompt to call for independence "

You can cut out prompt.

'our call for independence'

Answer 26

It's too many pauses in a sentence that makes it difficult for the reader.

Answer 27

u mean generally or just that sentence?

Answer 28

Just those particular sentences.

Answer 29

For those particular changes.

In general, you want your essay to have few pauses so that the reader can read easily.

Answer 30

"there were some pushing factors from the British that called for a foot down and guns blazing,'

Pressing might be a better word here to replace pushing.

Answer 31

But both those words are kind of light to lead up to 'a foot down and guns blazing.'

Perhaps, there were 'several swift and severe actions'

Answer 32

hey, that's good. i'll change that

Answer 33

do all of those occurrences seem in chronological order to you?

Answer 34

In your introduction, if you still plan on doing the Intolerable Acts, I'd mention them by name.

Answer 35

"Up until 1764, the British Parliament had for a time left Americans to their own governing accord"

This is another one of those pause situations. Move 'for a time' to the end of the sentence.

Answer 36

That sets up the next sentence well for an adverb, like 'Yet' or 'Then' as you have it.

Answer 37

oh yup you're right

Answer 38

Mhm k I can read through the rest now.

Answer 39

By the way, do you use Google Docs?

Answer 40

@lolokrat

Answer 41

i can put it on a google doc

Answer 42

Yeah I'll be able to critique faster.

Answer 43

I'll message you my email to share it with.

Answer 44

ok thanks sent