all right here is some of the book i'm currently writing, i need opinions.// I watch my home burn to the ground as I silently cry. They will pay. All of a sudden this creature jumps out of the fire. It looks like a dragon, shark, and a cat had a child together. It stops just before me and growls softly at me. I raise my hand to pet it, but it flinches away. " Its okay, I wont hurt you. " I whisper. The creature tentivly sniffs my hand, then nudges it softly. " Do you have a name " I ask, knowing the creature probably won't respond.

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ygk · Answer

it kind of moves too fast.  it needs more adjectives.  this seems like an important part in the book, so it needs this moment to be lengethned by focousing on the small things in this part.  but otherwise its preety good  good job mate

jungkook22 · Answer

ok thank you