Question

Ya'll I need help with this...

Answer 1

So I'm writing this poem
and if something don't sound right in it can y'all give me ideas or anything?

Answer 2

Sure ^-^

Answer 3

When my teddy bear goes to sleep,
I pray to God to sent sweet dreams.
I stay up,
Just to think of him.
I go to sleep,
With the smile on my face.
I wake up I had a dream.
About him being with me.
I hope he cares,
The way I care.
I hope he loves me,
The way I love him.

Answer 4

What should I add and remove lol

Answer 5

.o. question when you say "About him being with me." and "I hope he loves me,
The way I love him." is it like you and ur bf or you and god .-. just a question

Answer 6

its not God lol
its basically teddy bear is the nickname
and i ask God to send teddy bear dreams when he go to bed
and at the end I'm talking about teddy bear and me lol

Answer 7

idk i kinda feel stupid now

Answer 8

;w; oh lol thanks for clearing that up,although i think u should change this "I pray to God to sent sweet dreams." to "I pray to God to send sweet dreams." so it sounds more formall or smth .-.

Answer 9

oml thanks
lemme try that

Answer 10

When my teddy bear goes to sleep,
I pray to God to send sweet dreams.
I stay up,
Just to think of him.
I go to sleep,
With the smile on my face.
I wake up I had a dream.
About him being with me.
I hope he cares,
The way I care.
I hope he loves me,
The way I love him.

Answer 11

XD np im still reading it

Answer 12

change "With the smile on my face." to "With a smile on my face."

Answer 13

oml thxs @xXDerpyPugXx

Answer 14

so basically all i have is grammatical problems or whatever thats called

Answer 15

yes lol tbh ur tired so ofc u have grammer problems who dosent .-.

Answer 16

lol

x'D