In no fewer than three sentences, critique the following paragraph. Explain where it could be improved. Then, in your own words, rewrite the paragraph to make its writing stronger. Make sure you include a hook, supporting evidence, and a topic sentence. Use correct spelling and grammar.

Growing flowers is one of my happiest childhood memories. Gardening offers more than a way for kids to have fun. There are many things to gain from working with plants outside. It is unfortunate that many people feel too busy to garden. More people should take a chance with gardening to see what they can create. I am glad I learned to grow plants when I was a kid.

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In no fewer than three sentences, critique the following paragraph. Explain where it could be improved. Then, in your own words, rewrite the paragraph to make its writing stronger. Make sure you include a hook, supporting evidence, and a topic sentence. Use correct spelling and grammar.

Growing flowers is one of my happiest childhood memories. Gardening offers more than a way for kids to have fun. There are many things to gain from working with plants outside. It is unfortunate that many people feel too busy to garden. More people should take a chance with gardening to see what they can create. I am glad I learned to grow plants when I was a kid.

cpl106 · Answer

Growing flowers is one of my most delightful childhood memories. Gardening contributes more than a way for kids to have fun. There are countless things to gain from working with plants outside. Unfortunately, many people feel too occupied to garden. More people should take a chance with gardening to see what they can create. I am exhilarated I learned to grow plants when I was a kid.

MrBacon · Answer

thanks

cpl106 · Answer

anytime all i did was changed wordes in to more advanced and slightly bigger words with the same meaning