my little sis had to write a storey based on the following promp..
prompt: Recall a time when you observed something closely and in great detail. What was it? What did you learn? Write a narrative of your experience using descriptions that capture the mood of this event.

**Be sure that your narrative has a clear beginning, middle, and end. Use your mature voice, specific details, sensory descriptions, and dialogue. Proofread your work before submitting.
this is what she came up with please help me fix it.
One hot and bright Monday, I was sitting on my grandparents old wood porch watching the outside cats play together and I wondered what they did other than play, eat and sleep. I decided that for a week I would follow and observe each cat and recorded it in a notebook at first all I saw was them playing, eating and sleeping around my grandparents property. When I tried to follow the cats they somehow noticed me, so they would run and hide. I was starting to give up but I decided to try a few more days and each day I tried something different to follow them unnoticed.

My grandma asked, “What are you trying to do?” Be for I started following the cats I told her what I was going to do and why but I guess she forgot. So I had to tell her again.

“Do you not remember I wanted to know what the cats do every day and that I decided to follow them very day?” I said.

By Wednesday, I was able to follow the cats without them noticing me, I would tail them from a ways behind and slowly move inch by inch. It was fun and inserting to find out what they do. The more I watch and observe the cats' day by day I realized they all have different personalities and not just different fur colors. All the cats have unique personalities and looks, so I gave each one a name. I was really interested in this one I call Pepper she's a striped tabby cat she was acting aggressive to all the other cats and I wondered why, so I followed her more and found out she had kittens. Once I found her kittens, I knew why she was being aggressive it was because she was acting like a mother bear with its cub. After spending so much time with the cats and getting to know each of their different personalities I can tell when something's wrong with them and if you asked which one's my favorite I wouldn't be able to pick.

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my little sis had to write a storey based on the following promp..
prompt: Recall a time when you observed something closely and in great detail. What was it? What did you learn? Write a narrative of your experience using descriptions that capture the mood of this event.

**Be sure that your narrative has a clear beginning, middle, and end. Use your mature voice, specific details, sensory descriptions, and dialogue. Proofread your work before submitting.
this is what she came up with please help me fix it.
      One hot and bright Monday, I was sitting on my grandparents old wood porch watching the outside cats play together and I wondered what they did other than play, eat and sleep. I decided that for a week I would follow and observe each cat and recorded it in a notebook at first all I saw was them playing, eating and sleeping around my grandparents property. When I tried to follow the cats they somehow noticed me, so they would run and hide. I was starting to give up but I decided to try a few more days and each day I tried something different to follow them unnoticed.

My grandma asked, “What are you trying to do?” Be for I started following the cats I told her what I was going to do and why but I guess she forgot. So I had to tell her again.

“Do you not remember I wanted to know what the cats do every day and that I decided to follow them very day?” I said.

By Wednesday, I was able to follow the cats without them noticing me, I would tail them from a ways behind and slowly move inch by inch. It was fun and inserting to find out what they do. The more I watch and observe the cats' day by day I realized they all have different personalities and not just different fur colors. All the cats have unique personalities and looks, so I gave each one a name. I was really interested in this one I call Pepper she's a striped tabby cat she was acting aggressive to all the other cats and I wondered why, so I followed her more and found out she had kittens. Once I found her kittens, I knew why she was being aggressive it was because she was acting like a mother bear with its cub. After spending so much time with the cats and getting to know each of their different personalities I can tell when something's wrong with them and if you asked which one's my favorite I wouldn't be able to pick.

mxddi3 · Answer

there is some spelling mistakes such as in the second paragraph it sound say "before" not "be for"
i'm not quite sure what the significance of telling the grandmother is? that part is unclear. is there significant reason as to why this is there?

"I was really interested in this one I call Pepper she's a striped tabby cat she was acting aggressive to all the other cats and I wondered why, so I followed her more and found out she had kittens." -- this could use some semicolons or something because this is a run-on with many sentences inside of it.

at the end, you can split that last sentence, it doesn't have to be one.

mxddi3 · Answer

should* not sound, mb

gababb09 · Answer

thanks for helping. idk what she wanted me to do she just asked me for help to fix it and I just did not want to be the reason she get a bad grade.

mxddi3 · Answer

you're welcome. if you need an idea of how to fix, you can pm me !