Can someone read this and tell me what I need to correct?
Jefferson matters today because he fought for freedom and he fought for equality, and what he did as a president still affects what America is today. He accomplished quite a lot in his life from the clearing of the Rivanna River, something he considered a great achievement, to writing the iconic Declaration of Independence.

Jefferson fought for all Americans to have equal opportunities and rights. He was a true American who deserves to be remembered for what he did.
He was a man of true humility who wanted to be remembered for the freedom he helped this country get from Britain by writing the Declaration of Independence, his fight for religious freedom, and the work he did with free education and the founding of the University of Virginia. Jefferson was a man who wanted everyone to realize that they are equal and they have equal rights.

I think that we should continue teaching our children about Jefferson as a historical figure, but we also need to teach about the things we sometimes gloss over because he wasn’t perfect. However, A generation that doesn’t learn the many lessons that Jefferson can teach us is a generation that would very unstable. This would be a very fearful time to live in.

Jefferson is an important historical figure and we should speak about him. Even before his presidency, Jefferson accomplished some impressive things achievements. He wanted to keep individual liberty all Americans, Jefferson believed that everyone was worth the same in the eyes of god because of this that no man should be held higher than another.

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Can someone read this and tell me what I need to correct?
Jefferson matters today because he fought for freedom and he fought for equality, and what he did as a president still affects what America is today. He accomplished quite a lot in his life from the clearing of the Rivanna River, something he considered a great achievement, to writing the iconic Declaration of Independence.

Jefferson fought for all Americans to have equal opportunities and rights. He was a true American who deserves to be remembered for what he did. 
He was a man of true humility who wanted to be remembered for the freedom he helped this country get from Britain by writing the Declaration of Independence, his fight for religious freedom, and the work he did with free education and the founding of the University of Virginia. Jefferson was a man who wanted everyone to realize that they are equal and they have equal rights.

I think that we should continue teaching our children about Jefferson as a historical figure, but we also need to teach about the things we sometimes gloss over because he wasn’t perfect. However, A generation that doesn’t learn the many lessons that Jefferson can teach us is a generation that would very unstable. This would be a very fearful time to live in.
 
 Jefferson is an important historical figure and we should speak about him. Even before his presidency, Jefferson accomplished some impressive things achievements. He wanted to keep individual liberty all Americans, Jefferson believed that everyone was worth the same in the eyes of god because of this that no man should be held higher than another.

jimthompson5910 · Answer

You should expand on `but we also need to teach about the things we sometimes gloss over because he wasn’t perfect`.

girlcode · Answer

Ok thank you!

jimthompson5910 · Answer

You're welcome

mxddi3 · Answer

well for one, the sentence that says, "He was a man of true humility who wanted to be remembered for the freedom he helped this country get from Britain by writing the Declaration of Independence, his fight for religious freedom, and the work he did with free education and the founding of the University of Virginia." is a run-on. Also i think the 3rd paragraph, like the ending of it, it doesn't have many details so maybe expand on that. Also, the last paragraph, your leading sentence " Jefferson is an important historical figure and we should speak about him." could be altered. if it's your last paragraph, maybe do something like "In short, Jefferson was very influential in American history and should be studied by generation to come." Then you could go on with what you already have.