Question

Can someone proof read this


The youth council took a nonviolent approach, because they wanted to resolve the violence with peace. When they went into Katz drug store and sat at the lunch counter, they did it peacefully. They sat there even though they were getting called names and spat on. They even came back the next day, dressed in their nicest clothes, and sat down again until they got served. They didn’t bring any violence but received so much. While they were still there, she told them about her plan. They went to every downtown diner and sat as well. They sat there as a sign of them just wanting justice, to end segregation, and to end descrimination.

Answer 1

I need help in ELA

Answer 2

Im not a good writer

Answer 3

im not a good writer ether

Answer 4

i have to take a fat pee right now and my teacher wont let me leave the classroom.

Answer 5

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @JacobR
i have to take a fat pee right now and my teacher wont let me leave the classroom.
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tmi bro..

Answer 6

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @MxxnLight
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @JacobR
i have to take a fat pee right now and my teacher wont let me leave the classroom.
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
tmi bro..
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Answer 7

First, you use the word "they" quite often, and it's kinda annoying when there is so much repetition.
The sentence that says, "While they were still there, she told them about her plan. " is kinda confusing because who is "she" ? You never introduced this character so that needs to be fixed.
You said, "The youth council took a nonviolent approach, because they wanted to resolve the violence with peace" Well uh, your teacher may understand this but to an outsider who has no idea what your writing prompt was, this is confusing. Maybe try and introduce the scenario more.
" When they went into Katz drug store and sat at the lunch counter, they did it peacefully." Here, maybe you can change it to something like "They peacefully entered Katz drug store and sat at the lunch counter." By doing so, it will remove one of the times you say "they" which also helps with making it less repetitive. (:

Answer 8

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @JacobR
i have to take a fat pee right now and my teacher wont let me leave the classroom.
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
tmi

Answer 9

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @hhanan
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @JacobR
i have to take a fat pee right now and my teacher wont let me leave the classroom.
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
tmi
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we just said that. e.e

Answer 10

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @MxxnLight
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @hhanan
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @JacobR
i have to take a fat pee right now and my teacher wont let me leave the classroom.
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
tmi
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we just said that. e.e
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oh sorry

Answer 11

Thanks Bro

Answer 12

if comments don't relate to the question, please take them to the chat or dms (:

Answer 13

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @hhanan
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @MxxnLight
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @hhanan
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @JacobR
i have to take a fat pee right now and my teacher wont let me leave the classroom.
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
tmi
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
we just said that. e.e
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oh sorry
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It's okay not really a big deal lol..