Question

My name is elias Madrigal and I made a rap song its based on my life, I was wandering if some of you guys can review my work

Answer 1

Sure!

Answer 2

most of us will always review adn be as honest as possible

Answer 3

ok

Answer 4

Dear mom, I hope your ok, knowing that
Your kids will have to go through the pain
I will never love you the same ever since
That day you left me with my grandma you left
Me here to stay, i wished for you to come back
But you never did you never called to say happy
Birthday or give me a gift, what happens if my
Grandma did not take us in
Where would we be now i feel like a clown i waited for
You but you never came around it's been so long
I forgot how you sound you didn’t have to be
Perfect but you should of stuck around now I’m lost
And i feel like i can never be found I hate to hear your name
It makes me want to scream and shout i’m tryin to figure things
Out why did you leave me i’m just a kid i really did not deserve this
Sometimes i think of when i have kids and they ask me where are you
What do i say then but i'm not the one to judge i don’t blame you, your mom left
You so i guess it’s in our blood sometimes i think of you
And i search my mind, for another memories to keep your inside but I just
Want you to no im doing just fine

Answer 5

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @AnimeLover4363
Dear mom, I hope your ok, knowing that
Your kids will have to go through the pain
I will never love you the same ever since
That day you left me with my grandma you left
Me here to stay, i wished for you to come back
But you never did you never called to say happy
Birthday or give me a gift, what happens if my
Grandma did not take us in
Where would we be now i feel like a clown i waited for
You but you never came around it's been so long
I forgot how you sound you didn’t have to be
Perfect but you should of stuck around now I’m lost
And i feel like i can never be found I hate to hear your name
It makes me want to scream and shout i’m tryin to figure things
Out why did you leave me i’m just a kid i really did not deserve this
Sometimes i think of when i have kids and they ask me where are you
What do i say then but i'm not the one to judge i don’t blame you, your mom left
You so i guess it’s in our blood sometimes i think of you
And i search my mind, for another memories to keep your inside but I just
Want you to no im doing just fine
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
Thats deep af,nice rhymes u got pure talent

Answer 6

thx

Answer 7

was it good

Answer 8

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @AnimeLover4363
Dear mom, I hope your ok, knowing that
Your kids will have to go through the pain
I will never love you the same ever since
That day you left me with my grandma you left
Me here to stay, i wished for you to come back
But you never did you never called to say happy
Birthday or give me a gift, what happens if my
Grandma did not take us in
Where would we be now i feel like a clown i waited for
You but you never came around it's been so long
I forgot how you sound you didn’t have to be
Perfect but you should of stuck around now I’m lost
And i feel like i can never be found I hate to hear your name
It makes me want to scream and shout i’m tryin to figure things
Out why did you leave me i’m just a kid i really did not deserve this
Sometimes i think of when i have kids and they ask me where are you
What do i say then but i'm not the one to judge i don’t blame you, your mom left
You so i guess it’s in our blood sometimes i think of you
And i search my mind, for another memories to keep your inside but I just
Want you to no im doing just fine
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
I.. I astoished, this is amazing, and it flows nicely. Are you okay, though? If you need a friend DM me! Im always open-
But again this is amazig and it flows beautifully.

Answer 9

thx you so much this means a lot to me

Answer 10

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @AnimeLover4363
thx you so much this means a lot to me
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
Of course! I love too see my input means something.

Answer 11

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @AnimeLover4363
Dear mom, I hope your ok, knowing that
Your kids will have to go through the pain
I will never love you the same ever since
That day you left me with my grandma you left
Me here to stay, i wished for you to come back
But you never did you never called to say happy
Birthday or give me a gift, what happens if my
Grandma did not take us in
Where would we be now i feel like a clown i waited for
You but you never came around it's been so long
I forgot how you sound you didn’t have to be
Perfect but you should of stuck around now I’m lost
And i feel like i can never be found I hate to hear your name
It makes me want to scream and shout i’m tryin to figure things
Out why did you leave me i’m just a kid i really did not deserve this
Sometimes i think of when i have kids and they ask me where are you
What do i say then but i'm not the one to judge i don’t blame you, your mom left
You so i guess it’s in our blood sometimes i think of you
And i search my mind, for another memories to keep your inside but I just
Want you to no im doing just fine
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
Dang. It's good but i'm sorry about eveything. It sounds tuff

Answer 12

its cool if you want love your going to have to go through the pain