Question

I just entered a poetry contest and was wondering if my poem sounds ok. I made changes since the last time I posted this.

Hiraeth
A homesickness, For a home you can’t return to, or that never was

My hiraeth is you.
You’re my home I can’t return to.
Or once never was there.
I pretend that there once was a home for us.
Only to be disappointed that there never was one, to begin with.
My sweet hiraeth.
I can’t help but close my eyes and think of me being in your arms.
Comfy in our little bed, fireplace running, sweet bird humming.
Watching your sweet smile as I take deep breaths in, smelling your sweet smell.
Locking it in my head.
My Dear Hiraeth
I love you dearly
But this home was never there, to begin with.

Answer 1

THAT SOUNDS SO GOODDDDD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Girl You gon' win that contest I beleive in yuh!!!!

Answer 2

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Lexya
THAT SOUNDS SO GOODDDDD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Girl You gon' win that contest I beleive in yuh!!!!
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Aww love! Thank you SO much!

Answer 3

Your welcome!!!

Answer 4

It's very nice <3