Question

What do you guys think of this little section of my essay for English- criticism and any tips are appreciated!

His eyes averted from mine and looked to the ground for a second focusing on a lingering piece of dust blowing around. His chest taking in big breaths of air, He finally had the guts to swing his leg out from my side. I grabbed his arm and helped him exit from underneath. His soldiers were dusty and his hair messy. His face from red from the limited air underneath the bed. I got to my feet and looked at the door again. The creature must have found something of interest in the closet because I heard the clanks of buckets being dumped onto the ground with the individual noises of the object inside.
George got up from his knees and up to my level. I looked at him then started walking backwards slowly, taking long strides in my steps and placing each foot down carefully. George, being the nimble person he is, practically sprinted to the open hole in the wall. No sound coming from his paces.

Answer 1

I think it's pretty good! Keep up the good work!!!!