Question

hello :)
im a song writer and i need a bit of help
im not really sure if this is spam but if it is let me know and ill take it down!
its a bit repetitive so i need to know if its too much. im planning on preforming it with my band. :)
My darling
Your insecure hugs
Our beautiful goodbyes
They make me tremble
My darling
You used to bring me joy
But I lost all your love
To that beautiful boy

I don't know if you're into girls
I just wanna buy you pearls
And love you till the end
Till the end
But I didn't need you any way
I didn't need you any way

But then I saw you walking through the mall
You were the prettiest of them all
And I almost lost my balance
My heart filled with sadness
My beautiful girl
Is lost

And I don't know if you're into girls
I just wanna buy you pearls
And love you till the end
Till the end
But I didn't need you any way
I didn't need you any way


I didn't need you
I didn't need you
I didn't need you

And I don't know if you're into girls
I just wanna buy you pearls
And love you till the end
Till the end
But I didn't need you any way
I didn't need you any way

You didnt need to stay
You didnt need to stay
You didnt need to stay
With me

I didn't need you
I didn't need you
I didn't need you
I didn't need you
I didn't need you
I didn't need you
I didn't need you
I didn't need you
I didn't need you


I didnt need you anyway
I didnt want you to stay
I didnt need you anyway
I didnt want you to stay
I didnt need you anyway
I didnt want you to stay
I didnt need you anyway

And it made me really sad
when you said you didn't love me anymore
it really hurt me but that's okay
I didn't need you
anyway

Answer 1

Nice

Answer 2

thank you

Answer 3

Wow as an other songwriter that was really good, It really came together with all that honestly you can put anything else in it and it's not too much.

Answer 4

I think it is a little repetitive, but otherwise i see no problems. im no songwriter though so idk you'd want to take advice from me

Answer 5

I like it a lot actually, it is a bit repetitive so maybe make it a little less?? The only other thing i would say is try adding some metaphors and things like that rather than being so direct, metaphors can help make lyrics a lot stronger and give you a better song overall. But either way I love it, sounds nice

Answer 6

thank you :)

Answer 7

I like its really good it hits hard I feel it

Answer 8

it looks good!

Answer 9

thank you :)

Answer 10

Keep it up!

Answer 11

it's really good

Answer 12

thank you

Answer 13

Id change some of the I didn't need you's to I dont need you. variety is good. I write songs and sing myself, I love seeing more song writers join the platform! dm me if you ever need more help :)

Answer 14

I'm a pansexual genderfluid so i def understand the dont know if youre into girls part

Answer 15

dont would change the meaning, i put didnt so the song would mean like "i didnt need you but i do now"

Answer 16

but thank you!!

Answer 17

it is! but its about a regretful breakup

Answer 18

its not about me, one of my bandmembers asked me to write it and told me what its supposed to be about so i wrote it based on that :)