wrote a poem.. rate it

felt the breeze in my hair, i saw life and death, looked in front of me and i saw my breath, i felt like i wanted to die, i felt i had no life, my life came into repair, falling through the air, i had saw my death. i fell through a black hole, for hours and hours, wind gushing though my hair,i woke up and nothing was there.

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wrote a poem.. rate it

felt the breeze in my hair, i saw life and death, looked in front of me and i saw my breath, i felt like i wanted to die, i felt i had no life, my life came into repair, falling through the air, i had saw my death. i fell through a black hole, for hours and hours, wind gushing though my hair,i woke up and nothing was there.

mrwhskers · Answer

very sad...but its good!

antman1 · Answer

agreed i would rate it 9.5/10

EmilyHerron · Answer

i agree with them and it's really good and honest, i love it

tjmacc24 · Answer

100/10 had plenty dreams like that

DezWolf · Answer

thank you!

Joe348 · Answer

awesome sauce dude! 
I love the way you expressed yourself through poems as another form for people to understand you

Haileybailey · Answer

i kind of felt this, it's very good, although the choice of words you're choosing to rhyme is kind of ehh for me. could use a little work, but otherwise it's great and youll be a good writer as you go on