Is this good?
I was so scared, I dropped the piece of bark and it landed with a “thud” As I slowly picked up the bark my hands shaking i heard a knock at the door. “Who is it?” my mom said loudly, ….. there was no response, again bang, bang, bang.
“Honey please go open the door and see who it is”. I slowly walked towards the door, the floor creaking loudly as I took one step at a time. Once I got to the door I put my shaking hand on the shiny, golden doorknob. I slowly open the door my heart racing, “CREEEEAAAKKK” Once I opened the door immediately my heart stopped, I took one look and I screamwhed, shut the door and ran as fast as i could to my room.
“Daisy!!That was so rude, I am so sorry sir, please come in, I don't know what has come over my daughter”
“It's quite alright kids will be kids” as i was in my room I sneaked as quietly as I could to the kitchen and grabbed my backpack. Walking back to my room trying not to draw attention, I take a quick look at the man. I hear his raspy voice talking with my mom.
“I have a very special surprise for what was your daughter's name again?Oh right, daisy…” The old man said
“Yes, what about her?” My mom said “ I want to take Daisy to my house. It is a long drive from here but I will bring her back”
”I don't know ive never left Daisy with a stranger...” My heart was beating as rapidly as a rabbit. Would my mom actually have a creepy man take me to his home? Tears started to fill my eyes. I tried to hold them back but I could help but wonder what did that man want with me?

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Is this good?
I was so scared, I dropped the piece of bark and it landed with a “thud” As I slowly picked up the bark my hands shaking i heard a knock at the door. “Who is it?” my mom said loudly, ….. there was no response, again bang, bang, bang. 
“Honey please go open the door and see who it is”. I slowly walked towards the door, the floor creaking loudly as I took one step at a time. Once I got to the door I put my shaking hand on the shiny, golden doorknob. I slowly open the door my heart racing, “CREEEEAAAKKK” Once I opened the door immediately my heart stopped, I took one look and I screamwhed, shut the door and ran as fast as i could to my room. 
“Daisy!!That was so rude, I am so sorry sir, please come in, I don't know what has come over my daughter”
“It's quite alright kids will be kids” as i was in my room I sneaked as quietly as I could to the kitchen and grabbed my backpack. Walking back to my room trying not to draw attention, I take a quick look at the man. I hear his raspy voice talking with my mom. 
“I have a very special surprise for what was your daughter's name again?Oh right, daisy…” The old man said 
“Yes, what about her?” My mom said “ I want to take Daisy to my house. It is a long drive from here but I will bring her back” 
”I don't know ive never left Daisy with a stranger...” My heart was beating as rapidly as a rabbit. Would my mom actually have a creepy man take me to his home? Tears started to fill my eyes. I tried to hold them back but I could help but wonder what did that man want with me?

SeanyBean · Answer

Yes, it's good but make sure that your finished product has Punctuation where it is required and quotation marks where they belong, but otherwise this is amazing in my opinion. I think that you should continue your writing.

Lazorwolf64 · Answer

Aww thank you i will fix it thank you!!

SeanyBean · Answer

No problem!

DADDYROXY · Answer

@seanybean wrote:

Yes, it's good but make sure that your finished product has Punctuation where it is required and quotation marks where they belong, but otherwise this is amazing in my opinion. I think that you should continue your writing.

^ I agree

DADDYROXY · Answer

but it's good m8 (:

Lazorwolf64 · Answer

:)

SeanyBean · Answer

Mhm.

Sailor · Answer

@seanybean wrote:

Yes, it's good but make sure that your finished product has Punctuation where it is required and quotation marks where they belong, but otherwise this is amazing in my opinion. I think that you should continue your writing.

I agree :3

SeanyBean · Answer

@sailor wrote:

@seanybean wrote:

Yes, it's good but make sure that your finished product has Punctuation where it is required and quotation marks where they belong, but otherwise this is amazing in my opinion. I think that you should continue your writing.

I agree :3

Thanks

Sailor · Answer

@seanybean wrote:

@sailor wrote:

@seanybean wrote:

Yes, it's good but make sure that your finished product has Punctuation where it is required and quotation marks where they belong, but otherwise this is amazing in my opinion. I think that you should continue your writing.

I agree :3

Thanks

No problem

BrokenMoon · Answer

Nice! I love the amount of detail you used!

afflatedAnimism · Answer

I like it a lot!!