is this one good

roses are red

violets are blue

I'm in a rage

what should I do?

Question

is this one good

roses are red

violets are blue

I'm in a rage

what should I do?

NoodlesAndRiceYT · Answer

Its good, i just think its just a little too short.

MusicGeek · Answer

I like it. I don't care if it's short. It's still good. I mean, people make short poems all the time and become rich because of it.

TannerCroft · Answer

@noodlesandriceyt wrote:

Its good, i just think its just a little too short.

it is suppose to be short

NoodlesAndRiceYT · Answer

@musicgeek wrote:

I like it. I don't care if it's short. It's still good. I mean, people make short poems all the time and become rich because of it.

that is true, and sometimes people dont have the time to read a long poem.

MusicGeek · Answer

@noodlesandriceyt wrote:

@musicgeek wrote:

I like it. I don't care if it's short. It's still good. I mean, people make short poems all the time and become rich because of it.

that is true, and sometimes people dont have the time to read a long poem.

exactly. I don't like it when I tell someone i only have like 5 minutes, then i have to leave and they have me read something that is like, 3 pages long. I don't have the time but the person is waiting for feedback. So I prefer shorter things.

ewupsheesh · Answer

That is a good one I like it

ILOVESPAGHETTI · Answer

Alright, I really like this. It looks good. Maybe you should try writing some more expressive poems? Just a suggestion, but it's a solid poem.

TannerCroft · Answer

ok

ewupsheesh · Answer

May I give some ideas?

ILOVESPAGHETTI · Answer

@tannercroft wrote:

ok

I'd love to see what you could write.

TannerCroft · Answer

@ewupsheesh wrote:

May I give some ideas?

sure

afflatedAnimism · Answer

This isn't that well written, I'm sorry. It starts with the dreaded "roses are red, violets are blue" there's not enough length to draw interest, even if it's short. You have potential, I can see it, but you're not using it in the right way

ewupsheesh · Answer

@afflatedanimism wrote:

This isn't that well written, I'm sorry. It starts with the dreaded "roses are red, violets are blue" there's not enough length to draw interest, even if it's short. You have potential, I can see it, but you're not using it in the right way

???

afflatedAnimism · Answer

@ewupsheesh wrote:

@afflatedanimism wrote:

This isn't that well written, I'm sorry. It starts with the dreaded "roses are red, violets are blue" there's not enough length to draw interest, even if it's short. You have potential, I can see it, but you're not using it in the right way

???

Sorry for the confusion I meant to say how you should never start with roses are red violets are blue because it's overused and sounds bad.

TannerCroft · Answer

not its not

ewupsheesh · Answer

@afflatedanimism wrote:

This isn't that well written, I'm sorry. It starts with the dreaded "roses are red, violets are blue" there's not enough length to draw interest, even if it's short. You have potential, I can see it, but you're not using it in the right way

I agree he,sheor they or whatever they are couldve done better this person did good in my perspective

TannerCroft · Answer

im a he

afflatedAnimism · Answer

@ewupsheesh wrote:

@afflatedanimism wrote:

This isn't that well written, I'm sorry. It starts with the dreaded "roses are red, violets are blue" there's not enough length to draw interest, even if it's short. You have potential, I can see it, but you're not using it in the right way

I agree he,sheor they or whatever they are couldve done better this person did good in my perspective

They did good in the last part but the intro needs something to make it stand out.

ewupsheesh · Answer

Ok that is good to know

afflatedAnimism · Answer

@tannercroft wrote:

im a he

Me too omg

afflatedAnimism · Answer

@tannercroft wrote:

not its not

It doesn't sound bad but it is really overused

afflatedAnimism · Answer

I've seen at least 2 poems start with that line as of today

TannerCroft · Answer

i bet one of them were probably mine

TaitlynCroft · Answer

Roses are red, violets are blue,
I'm in a rage, what should I do?
Should I keep going or will I get lost?
But if I don't stop, what is the cost?
Give me a sign! Give me a thought!
Somebody just tell me if I'm right or not?!?
But wait that sound...
You hear it right??
Angels singing, about to take flight.
They came to get me.

afflatedAnimism · Answer

@taitlyncroft wrote:

Roses are red, violets are blue, I'm in a rage, what should I do? Should I keep going or will I get lost? But if I don't stop, what is the cost? Give me a sign! Give me a thought! Somebody just tell me if I'm right or not?!? But wait that sound... You hear it right?? Angels singing, about to take flight. They came to get me.

I love your writing flow sm

ewupsheesh · Answer

@taitlyncroft wrote:

Roses are red, violets are blue, I'm in a rage, what should I do? Should I keep going or will I get lost? But if I don't stop, what is the cost? Give me a sign! Give me a thought! Somebody just tell me if I'm right or not?!? But wait that sound... You hear it right?? Angels singing, about to take flight. They came to get me.

Wow that was really good to be honest

TaitlynCroft · Answer

Thanks.

ewupsheesh · Answer

mhm