Question

So far for my horror story.. What should I add? Posting in comments.

Answer 1

I was waiting. Just waiting for my mom to come home for my birthday,she never came back. I shiver thinking of the bad things that could've happened to her. My little sister wakes up right next to me looking around for mom. “Mom?” She asked. My little sister Emma is so focused on looking for mom. She has bad anxiety without mom. I quickly run upstairs to her room, “Shh.. It’s ok Em.” She starts to cry, but then suddenly I hear a laugh. A women’s laugh. “Did u hear that?” I ask. “Hear what?” Emma says. “It sounded like.. Nvm..” I said, “No! TELL ME!” Emma said. Idk what to do.. Wether tell my 5 year old sister or not. She is only 5 I am 14, so idk what to do about this whole thing. “Jordyn tell me now or I will tell mommy!” If only she knew mom is not home yet..

Answer 2

Put something to add into the rising action for a story and then make that to the conflict of the story, that will really intertane people into reading your story!

Answer 3

SHOOT

Answer 4

oops sorry i didnt mean to do that

Answer 5

Ah well to write a story you need to know Expostion, Rising action, Climax, Falling Action, and Resolution.

Answer 6

And with that is how you can write your story good, you need all that in your story to make it entertaining and like your readers dont want to stop reading the story.

Answer 7

That can help you figure out what you need in your story next as well.

Answer 8

So far I did the Expostion.

Answer 9

You would want a conflict in your story, and your already doing good with that it looks like, but you need more on it, thats how you get your rising action going.

Answer 10

So you got your story going good, you just need to get your rising action going that is going to get your readers hooked

Answer 11

Is this good?

Answer 12

The characters: Emma,Jordyn,Anna,Jossiah
This story is about a girls birthday, and her mom went missing! She goes to look for her mom.. But then something bad happens.. Stay tuned to find out! Or if u can stand this scare..

This rising action is a girl looking for her mom, but then someone shocking shows up.. Or shall I say “someone”?







CHAPTER ONE: Missing mom I was waiting. Just waiting for my mom to come home for my birthday,she never came back. I shiver thinking of the bad things that could've happened to her. My little sister wakes up right next to me looking around for mom. “Mom?” She asked. My little sister Emma is so focused on looking for mom. She has bad anxiety without mom. I quickly run upstairs to her room, “Shh.. It’s ok Em.” She starts to cry, but then suddenly I hear a laugh. A women’s laugh. “Did u hear that?” I ask. “Hear what?” Emma says. “It sounded like.. Nvm..” I said, “No! TELL ME!” Emma said. Idk what to do.. Wether tell my 5 year old sister or not. She is only 5 I am 14, so idk what to do about this whole thing. “Jordyn tell me now or I will tell mommy!” If only she knew mom is not home yet.. I keep on hearing the laugh.. What in the-? Is someone in the woods!? Oh no.. I was watching a horror movie last night.. Could that mean-? No no.. IT CAN’T BE! “JORDYN!!!!” I hear a slight whisper. Oh god.. OH GOD!!!! NO NO NO NO. NOT HER. My ex best friend, Anna. She is a complete terrible person. She will do ANYTHING to make my life a living hell. No no no no.. NOT HER!!!! I see her.. In the shadow calling my name..

Answer 13

So you dont need our help, you just need to get your imagination going with what else needs to happen.

Answer 14

I believe your story is going good right now, maybe put more on what the person is feeling and where they are so the readers can have a more of a visual of the story

Answer 15

cool

Answer 16

Your story looks good like Noodles said you really dont need are help because your story is looking great already you just need to create more of in imagination and your good to go, good luck on the rest of your story. (:

Answer 17

i think this looks good, just like Noodles said you should work on the rising action and more descriptive language. Also, you should work on your grammar. I feel like it is easier for your readers to understand if you use correct grammar, no abbreviations and perhaps no contractions. IF this is for an assignment, please use correct spelling and the tips mentioned above. Happy writing!

Answer 18

I think so far it's good could use a bit more though so far it's not at it's best but it's not bad either it's okay a bit more work and it will look golden :)

Answer 19

I like it, in the first part try to not say the word mom so much, otherwise its perfect

Answer 20

you mean jorjnwfas the egijpoass