I've been workin on a story for awhile, just wanted to hear anyone's thoughts n stuffs about it, any tweaks i should make, etc
Ish in the POV of a kid, btw,
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1offm3hTvmw_-4CbL4h1rUrygMA5dSCetUCzN2Kl3z_g/edit?usp=sharing

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I've been workin on a story for awhile, just wanted to hear anyone's thoughts n stuffs about it, any tweaks i should make, etc
Ish in the POV of a kid, btw, 
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1offm3hTvmw_-4CbL4h1rUrygMA5dSCetUCzN2Kl3z_g/edit?usp=sharing

MidniteSunny · Answer

fair warning: it's 3 pages
so yeh doesnt take a short while to read unless u a fast reader ig

badboy1557 · Answer

Can you send to me on dm i read the first three paragraphs and i really am interested on it i just dont have the time to read everything now

MidniteSunny · Answer

oki

badboy1557 · Answer

Thx i give feedback later, have a nice day!

QuestionCoveBot · Answer

Well as soon as I opened it, I saw a problem. No indenting.

Otherwise it's good.

MidniteSunny · Answer

ah yeah i did no indents on purpose, ty for readin ^^

QuestionCoveBot · Answer

@midnitesunny wrote:

ah yeah i did no indents on purpose, ty for readin ^^

How come? I'd say indenting is key for a good story.

MidniteSunny · Answer

bcuz it looks cleaner

MidniteSunny · Answer

idk

QuestionCoveBot · Answer

I wouldn't say "looks cleaner." In fact I'd say no indents makes it more messy.

QuestionCoveBot · Answer

But you do you. It's good.

AriaLycan · Answer

Cool!

Cheche · Answer

Hello

kaleighh533 · Answer

The amount of imagination you put into this story is absolutely amazing, I love how your story also fits perfectly well with the title you chose. I wouldn't change anything, ¨ANYTHINGGGG¨ about your story except for the fact, that it needs to be longer so I can read more of it lol anyways great job it looks amazing keep up the good work!

BrokenMoon · Answer

I like it a lot, try indenting but besides that its GREAT

26millecai · Answer

Looks great! :)