Question

Excuse me but could someone help me grade my paper and give me feedback on what I should fix? I'll give you my grading rubic

Answer 1

Sure lets see the paper and the grading rubric

Answer 2

alright!

Answer 3

heres the essay

Answer 4

What would happen if trees were gone? And why is it important?
Source used: Scitable

Do you ever consider what the world would be like if trees didn't exist?
Humans should refrain from harming trees since it may result in the extinction of human and animal species. Trees are a crucial factor to our existence not only because they produce paper, lumber and chewing gum, but because they serve an important role in the carbon cycle. Humans would not be able to exist without trees since the air would be unfit for breathing. In addition, people would have to construct gas masks that filtered the little oxygen that remained in the air. Without tree’s the world would then end. Scitable claims, “Trees generate the majority of the oxygen that humans and wildlife breathe, therefore life on Earth would be impossible without them. Without trees we wouldn’t have carbon, carbon is the second important resource. “Trees are a crucial part of the carbon cycle, a global process in which carbon dioxide constantly circulates through the atmosphere into organisms and back again.”

To sum up, it is well recognized that without trees, animals and humans would perish; therefore, it is critical to care for trees because it can cost the world; caring for trees does not take long.

Answer 5

You did really good, Plus I am pretty sure you did everything that was in the rubric. I just looked at it, i think you did good and got everything you need

Answer 6

Well for this assignment they kind of want me to fix at least three things which Im not sure of

Answer 7

Okay i will look over it again

Answer 8

Thank you : )

Answer 9

ofc

Answer 10

Maybe at the beginning where it says:

"Do you ever consider what the world would be like if trees didn't exist?" maybe rephrase it? instead of a question make it a statement

Answer 11

Ah let me fix that and send you the new sentence then

Answer 12

oh wait but thats the hook

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Um maybe like the world would be affected in a negative way if so and so, or something like that maybe

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So what I actually did

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was put a statement after my hook

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so the reader gets an idea of what the topic is about

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Yes that should be good!

Answer 18

alright!

Answer 19

im trying to look for something else to revise rn

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okay I found something so i actually quoted one of the sentences because i forgot i got it from a source

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I quoted “Trees are a crucial factor to our existence not only because they produce paper, lumber and chewing gum, but because they serve an important role in the carbon cycle.”

Answer 22

thats perfect

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okay so i noticed

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For the end i forgot to put an ending transition

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Yes i just noticed that

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oh wait nvm

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I put to sum it up

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maybe right after this,

“Trees are a crucial part of the carbon cycle, a global process in which carbon dioxide constantly circulates through the atmosphere into organisms and back again.”

Maybe try to explain what you mean by it after that to clarify

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oh your right

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let me think of something

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okay c:

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okay so after that i put "This clarifies the significance of carbon." would that work?

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yes it would, exactly correct

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yay now we get three things revised

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yes!

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alright so this is my revision page

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Revision: So what I actually did in the start is after the hook, I made a statement about how without trees the planet wouldn’t exist. Second, I quoted “Trees are a crucial factor to our existence not only because they produce paper, lumber and chewing gum, but because they serve an important role in the carbon cycle.” because I originally forgot I got this from the source Scitable, but had rephrased it. After the quote “Trees are a crucial part of the carbon cycle, a global process in which carbon dioxide constantly circulates through the atmosphere into organisms and back again.” I explained later on that it meant it would explain how important carbon is.

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That is a perfect revision

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Thank you sm! : )

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I think you summed up everything good, and gave thought and put great detail into everything

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ofcc

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: D

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So is the grading cubic good

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do you think it'd be enough

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Yes it should be definitely good

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Alright thank you for helping and grading me on this assignment today :)

Answer 47

ofcc no problem! glad to help

Answer 48

gave you a star and already was a fan<3

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thank you! <3

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bye bye!

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byes

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and yw!