Question

So in ELA class today we were asked to write a pov/ perspective thingie and we are supposed to read a short story and then pick a character in the story and write from their perspective so i need some like advice and constructive criticism:


Scene from “The Birthmark” by Nathaniel Hawthorne
Aylmer tells his wife that the mark on her left cheek is unattractive and that she should consider getting it removed. -Told through Aylmer’s perspective.

I’m sitting at the dining room table with my beautiful young wife, Georgiana. She’s so perfectly perfect…but there is a little mark on her left cheek, shaped like a little red hand, might I add, that just barely ruins her beautiful complexion. It makes me so upset that she has never thought about removing it. At least I don’t think she has. An idea pops into my head.
“Georgiana,” I said to my wife, “have you ever thought, possibly, that mark on your cheek could be removed?”
“No,” she answers smiling. “The mark has been called a charm that I was simple enough to imagine it might be one.”
“Perhaps on another face,” I tell her, “but not on yours. You’re so perfect that this small defect shocks me as being a sign of earthly imperfection.”
Her face turns red and she yells, “Shocks you! Then why did you marry me? You cannot love what shocks you!”
I don’t understand why she is getting so upset! What I said was that she was so perfect and beautiful but her birthmark ruins it, just barely though. If Georgiana were to be less beautiful, perhaps my love would have been increased by the prettiness of the mark. But she was so perfect that I found the birthmark an imperfection, unattractive.
“I never said that you shock me, what I said was that the birthmark shocks me. I’m shocked by the birthmark because I cannot believe that it would be on such a beautiful face as yours. It just doesn’t belong, my love.” I tell her, calmly.
She seems to relax a bit, but she still looks a bit hurt. I put my hand on hers. “Georgiana,” I say softly, “ I think you are a perfect human being but this birthmark shocks me that it would belong on your face and maybe you should consider getting it removed.”
She sighs. “Do you remember the dream you had last night about this hateful mark?”

Answer 1

you should read it and pick a character and put yourself in there shoes

Answer 2

so if you were them what would you do? what would happen?

Answer 3

this is my version i picked Aylmer's POV

Answer 4

I feel if it is yours and your pov it should be good :)