Question

I wrote a litte short story based off of a prompt i found
Prompt: Write the happiest scene you can but add a really messed up ending

Answer 1

As I stepped off the train I couldn't help but feel elated after all I was seeing you, I headed into the station, and I looked around eagerly and I suddenly saw you. You beautiful you waiting there for me I excitedly run over to you watching as you start smiling as i run into your arms mine wrapping around your back I look at you and I take it in your smell, your smile, your hair every beautiful curl on her head, your beautiful beautiful green eyes and every little freckle on your face and i try counting them all before I suddenly feel you jolt forward with a look of shock and sadness on your face, a little gasp of pain escapes from your lips, and as I back away letting you fall, I see a knife buried directly in middle of your chest piercing through your heart a quick death but not instant I don't jump or scream or sob because I was the one that put it there. I sat down and took one last look at you whispering, “I’m sorry it had to be this way i loved you i truly did” at you with tears in my eyes I watch as you slowly shut your eyes. After a moment I gave her one final kiss, all the memories flooding back, and I brushed a lock of hair out of her face. I wiped my tears away as I was walking away. I noticed something shiny on her neck and I realized it was a necklace. I bent down and took the necklace you were wearing, the engagement gift I got for you years ago. I say that I realize today is our anniversary before standing up and walking out of the train station with tears in my eyes and thinking, I'm doing this for us. I promise you wouldn't have wanted to see what our world has turned into. It's for the better. With a sad pit of regret settling in my stomach I walk out of the station repeating to myself it’s for the better. I did this for us.

Answer 2

@clayy69 its way sadder now

Answer 3

this sounds like a movie 🦧 pero it's very good, I like how you put in a lot of details.

Answer 4

i have a few grammar mistakes

Answer 5

im sure people know what you mean💀

Answer 6

Yes, lazer is right. despite the errors in your grammar, it is amazing.

Answer 7

I wuv ittt

Answer 8

This plot is so thrilling! AS the others said, some grammar mistakes. Despite it, this is really good! Amazing job.