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All these voices in my head sometimes I feel dead, my body going numb to everything, pain being the only thing I feel… even that fading away. I’ve been molested time and time again ra*ped countless times, my life drowning before my eyes.. And they say I'm too young to hurt.. Was I too young to be molested at 6, no no I was just the right age for them...was I too young again months later, too young at 15 was i f*cking too young to be raped repeatedly and told to be quite… this ongoing pain carried into my life now … I'm just 17.. Don't tell me I'm too young to know what pain is… I’ve lived without a home before.. Went without a meal.. I’ve cut many times just to feel something. I’ve wondered everyday what the hell was wrong with me, why me, was I alone… so I'm sorry if I feel abandoned.. Sorry if I bother you looking for a conversation… Sorry if I seek a connection that won't be there or can’t be there. I’m just searching for what I never had, I’m sorry if I ever get a bit mad, often many times I'm more sad.Life for me is just one big enclosed maze I fight my way through time and time again first going thru the bushes trying to find my way out the thorns growing sharper cutting my arms, legs, and face , but I dont care I keep going till i hit the brick knocking the wind out of me. I sulk to the ground in a pitiful mess..

What is it i need to work on as far as the format and punctuation sorry if mah life details too explicit .

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*EXPLICIT DETAILS WRITING english 3*

All these voices in my head sometimes I feel dead, my body going numb to everything, pain being the only thing I feel… even that fading away. I’ve been molested time and time again ra*ped countless times, my life drowning before my eyes.. And they say I'm too young to hurt.. Was I too young to be molested at 6, no no I was just the right age for them...was I too young again months later, too young at 15 was i f*cking too young to be raped repeatedly and told to be quite… this ongoing pain carried into my life now … I'm just 17.. Don't tell me I'm too young to know what pain is… I’ve lived without a home before.. Went without a meal.. I’ve cut many times just to feel something. I’ve wondered everyday what the hell was wrong with me, why me, was I alone… so I'm sorry if I feel abandoned.. Sorry if I bother you looking for a conversation… Sorry if I seek a connection that won't be there or can’t be there. I’m just searching for what I never had, I’m sorry if I ever get a bit mad, often many times I'm more sad.Life for me is just one big enclosed maze I fight my way through time and time again first going thru the bushes trying to find my way out the thorns growing sharper cutting my arms, legs, and face , but I dont care I keep going till i hit the brick knocking the wind out of me. I sulk to the ground in a pitiful mess..

What is it i need to work on as far as the format and punctuation sorry if mah life details too explicit .

ItzLily · Answer

This is so deep, I feel like if this is you're story that you're telling; there isn't anything wrong with it. Its amazing, honestly this is very brave of you.

ZdaddYjayjay · Answer

@itzlily wrote:

This is so deep, I feel like if this is you're story that you're telling; there isn't anything wrong with it. Its amazing, honestly this is very brave of you.

This is only part of my story but thank you for saying it's brave of me it gives me confidence

BrokenMoon · Answer

Work on spelling a bit too, but besides that I really do enjoy it. You did a wonderful job conveying emotion in this. When you are completely finished with this work of art perhaps you might be willing to reach out to me and let me read it? Ii look forward to seeing more work from you. Very very well done.

ZdaddYjayjay · Answer

@brokenmoon wrote:

Work on spelling a bit too, but besides that I really do enjoy it. You did a wonderful job conveying emotion in this. When you are completely finished with this work of art perhaps you might be willing to reach out to me and let me read it? Ii look forward to seeing more work from you. Very very well done.

Thank you moon I greatly appreciate that and once I finish it I dont mind letting you red the finished version

ZdaddYjayjay · Answer

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BrokenMoon · Answer

@zdaddyjayjay wrote:

@brokenmoon wrote:

Work on spelling a bit too, but besides that I really do enjoy it. You did a wonderful job conveying emotion in this. When you are completely finished with this work of art perhaps you might be willing to reach out to me and let me read it? Ii look forward to seeing more work from you. Very very well done.

Thank you moon I greatly appreciate that and once I finish it I dont mind letting you red the finished version

Of course! Anytime, I'm always happy to help a fellow author! You have a lot to look forward to if you keep showing this kind of talent.

ZdaddYjayjay · Answer

@brokenmoon wrote:

@zdaddyjayjay wrote:

@brokenmoon wrote:

Work on spelling a bit too, but besides that I really do enjoy it. You did a wonderful job conveying emotion in this. When you are completely finished with this work of art perhaps you might be willing to reach out to me and let me read it? Ii look forward to seeing more work from you. Very very well done.

Thank you moon I greatly appreciate that and once I finish it I dont mind letting you red the finished version

Of course! Anytime, I'm always happy to help a fellow author! You have a lot to look forward to if you keep showing this kind of talent.

In the future when I write more I'll let you read it see if you like it, I do plan to be some sort of poet or book author.

BrokenMoon · Answer

@zdaddyjayjay wrote:

@brokenmoon wrote:

@zdaddyjayjay wrote:

@brokenmoon wrote:

Work on spelling a bit too, but besides that I really do enjoy it. You did a wonderful job conveying emotion in this. When you are completely finished with this work of art perhaps you might be willing to reach out to me and let me read it? Ii look forward to seeing more work from you. Very very well done.

Thank you moon I greatly appreciate that and once I finish it I dont mind letting you red the finished version

Of course! Anytime, I'm always happy to help a fellow author! You have a lot to look forward to if you keep showing this kind of talent.

In the future when I write more I'll let you read it see if you like it, I do plan to be some sort of poet or book author.

That sounds like an excellent career choice. And I would love to read more in the future. Thank you!

Ferrari · Answer

This has cuss words.

Ferrari · Answer

I kind of like it, but it has cuss wordz.

ZdaddYjayjay · Answer

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@ferrari wrote:

I kind of like it, but it has cuss wordz.

understood