hey....i wrote a poem.....i need some feedback...
" soon will be my sunset with no sunrise"
People tell me this life is worth something
People tell me i have to keep pushing
I look into the future and see nothing
But an endless line of my blood gushing
I bought what they said
But couldn't refund the lies
Slowly pieces of my heart get sold
And my soul begins to die
But i still try
I fake a smile
But i still cry
I cant finish the rest of this mile
I want to begin leaving
My time is up
I'm tired of breathing
I want to shoot, cut, drown, and jump
I want to say Good Night
Without a tomorrow in the future
To those who care
Soon i will no longer be in the picture
And soon i will say my final Good-Bye
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JoshSimmons999:
This shii got me crying it's so emotional and deep I feel it and I understand what your trynna say
DaRealestVic:
@joshsimmons999 wrote:
This shii got me crying it's so emotional and deep I feel it and I understand what your trynna say
sorry u understand it.......ty for the feedback.....and dont cry to hard
JoshSimmons999:
I'll try not to
DaRealestVic:
@joshsimmons999 wrote:
I'll try not to
good
JoshSimmons999:
Yea
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Demonwolf:
Dam that was good but i felt that and reminds me of myself so it was touching ig you could say
DaRealestVic:
@demonwolf wrote:
Dam that was good but i felt that and reminds me of myself so it was touching ig you could say
ty for the feedback
Demonwolf:
@darealestvic wrote:
@demonwolf wrote:
Dam that was good but i felt that and reminds me of myself so it was touching ig you could say
ty for the feedback
np it is the least i can do so keep it up ^^
DaRealestVic:
@demonwolf wrote:
@darealestvic wrote:
@demonwolf wrote:
Dam that was good but i felt that and reminds me of myself so it was touching ig you could say
ty for the feedback
np it is the least i can do so keep it up ^^
i will try
Demonwolf:
@darealestvic wrote:
@demonwolf wrote:
@darealestvic wrote:
@demonwolf wrote:
Dam that was good but i felt that and reminds me of myself so it was touching ig you could say
ty for the feedback
np it is the least i can do so keep it up ^^
i will try
good enough for me lol
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DaRealestVic:
@demonwolf wrote:
@darealestvic wrote:
@demonwolf wrote:
@darealestvic wrote:
@demonwolf wrote:
Dam that was good but i felt that and reminds me of myself so it was touching ig you could say
ty for the feedback
np it is the least i can do so keep it up ^^
i will try
good enough for me lol
yeaa
Demonwolf:
@darealestvic wrote:
@demonwolf wrote:
@darealestvic wrote:
@demonwolf wrote:
@darealestvic wrote:
@demonwolf wrote:
Dam that was good but i felt that and reminds me of myself so it was touching ig you could say
ty for the feedback
np it is the least i can do so keep it up ^^
i will try
good enough for me lol
yeaa
not like i can force you or something
DaRealestVic:
@demonwolf wrote:
@darealestvic wrote:
@demonwolf wrote:
@darealestvic wrote:
@demonwolf wrote:
@darealestvic wrote:
@demonwolf wrote:
Dam that was good but i felt that and reminds me of myself so it was touching ig you could say
ty for the feedback
np it is the least i can do so keep it up ^^
i will try
good enough for me lol
yeaa
not like i can force you or something
tru
Sharkattack123:
its ok
DaRealestVic:
@sharkattack123 wrote:
its ok
ty for the feedback
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ItzDanger:
This had me in my feelings ngl. I feel everything that you said because this is me. Theres always going to be hard times and struggle points in your life, and its going to be difficult at times but you also have to look at the good in your life too. God puts you thru these things that you go thru to make you stronger. You have a purpose, and that purpose is to guide the weak out of the dark depths that you've been thru, and lead them to the light. You need to be there for people because alot of people need you and want you. Keep your head up and never bow down for nobody no matta what. Your amazing,your a queen, and your beautiful, funny, caring, and you have a big heart. I love you victorya -hubby
DaRealestVic:
@itzdanger wrote:
This had me in my feelings ngl. I feel everything that you said because this is me. Theres always going to be hard times and struggle points in your life, and its going to be difficult at times but you also have to look at the good in your life too. God puts you thru these things that you go thru to make you stronger. You have a purpose, and that purpose is to guide the weak out of the dark depths that you've been thru, and lead them to the light. You need to be there for people because alot of people need you and want you. Keep your head up and never bow down for nobody no matta what. Your amazing,your a queen, and your beautiful, funny, caring, and you have a big heart. I love you victorya -hubby
ty for the feedback<3...it meant a lot
ItzDanger:
@darealestvic wrote:
@itzdanger wrote:
This had me in my feelings ngl. I feel everything that you said because this is me. Theres always going to be hard times and struggle points in your life, and its going to be difficult at times but you also have to look at the good in your life too. God puts you thru these things that you go thru to make you stronger. You have a purpose, and that purpose is to guide the weak out of the dark depths that you've been thru, and lead them to the light. You need to be there for people because alot of people need you and want you. Keep your head up and never bow down for nobody no matta what. Your amazing,your a queen, and your beautiful, funny, caring, and you have a big heart. I love you victorya -hubby
ty for the feedback<3...it meant a lot
Yea ofc
Astrid1:
Wow, this is very emotional v.v, It's sad, but in society nowadays this is what a lot of people are going through. It's nice to see you all so clear and kind. I hope that you find light in the dark and strive through the tumbleweeds to reach the prettiest landscape you've seen.
DaRealestVic:
@astrid1 wrote:
Wow, this is very emotional v.v, It's sad, but in society nowadays this is what a lot of people are going through. It's nice to see you all so clear and kind. I hope that you find light in the dark and strive through the tumbleweeds to reach the prettiest landscape you've seen.
ty for the feedback
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MaxyDaKid:
It’s good but I hope ur doing well..
DaRealestVic:
@maxydakid wrote:
It’s good but I hope ur doing well..
ty for the feedback....and im fine ty for asking
Rosalie:
really great poem, you should become a writer only if you want but seriously i love this poem if we were rating it which we aren't i'd rate it 100/10
DaRealestVic:
@rosalie wrote:
really great poem, you should become a writer only if you want but seriously i love this poem if we were rating it which we aren't i'd rate it 100/10
ty for the feedback
kand1k1d:
I cried, THIS IS AMAZING!! you should become a poet!!
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DaRealestVic:
@kand1k1d wrote:
I cried, THIS IS AMAZING!! you should become a poet!!
maybe someday...idk tho...ty for the feedback
kenza4006:
its good i deff like it, its really nicely structured and it flows so well keep doing what your doing and if you need anyone to read and give feedback about poems im always here i love giving feedback and i dont try to make anything negative i give tips for anything so you text me if you need help
DaRealestVic:
@kenza4006 wrote:
its good i deff like it, its really nicely structured and it flows so well keep doing what your doing and if you need anyone to read and give feedback about poems im always here i love giving feedback and i dont try to make anything negative i give tips for anything so you text me if you need help
ty for the feedback
12082006:
Ayo this to deep nd I felt that frfr
12082006:
Its good tho
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DaRealestVic:
@12082006 wrote:
Its good tho
ty for the feedback
kenza4006:
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404:
This drowns with feeling, of a broken heart, it's a good poem, but it sounds like a suicide letter, if your feeling like this, and I assume you do, if you ever want someone to talk to I'm always here :)
DaRealestVic:
@404 wrote:
This drowns with feeling, of a broken heart, it's a good poem, but it sounds like a suicide letter, if your feeling like this, and I assume you do, if you ever want someone to talk to I'm always here :)
thx for the feedback but no thx for venting
becca974:
i it so much
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