I need thoughts on this creative writing task I did... The Library~ A bright, warm fire crackled merrily in its niche in the wall. Unable to decide if it was going to be red, orange, or blue, it displayed all the colors as it licked at the grey stone walls encasing it. A comfortable warmth spread throughout the room. A deep mahogany fireplace surrounded the fire, its shelf covered in a variety of music boxes. Large windows took place of the wall to the left of the fireplace with its colorful flames. The windows stretched about two stories high and spanned another fifteen feet long until it reached a set of rich violet, double set doors that lead outside. The windows provided a breathtaking view of willow trees swaying in a lazy wind with cherry blossoms, from the respective trees, that dotted the emerald green lawn, floating softly into the turquoise river that ran into the great forest. Blue and purple hued mountains lurked in the backdrop with silky white clouds hovering over their peaks as the sun descended for the night, coloring the sky a rosy gold. To the west, the crescent moon began its steady climb to its heavenly throne casting a soft silvery glow. The steady sound of rain pelted the windows in small taps as the fire continued its dance. A medium sized table sat on the right side of the fireplace. An assortment of parchment paper, colorful quills, ink trays, a variety of pens, and various books littered its top. Another set of double doors sat next to the table, but these were an indigo blue with silver inlaid. A squat rolling chair was tucked neatly into the table with the wheel of one leg causing the soft black carpet to gently curl.
I actually love it!! The way you describe everything is so unique, I'd love to read more. There are just a few grammatical errors though. In "Large windows took place of the wall to the left of the fireplace with its colorful flames," it seems as though the preposition used is wrong. It should be *took place on the wall In the sentence, "Blue and purple hued mountains lurked in the backdrop with silky white clouds hovering over their peaks as the sun descended for the night" (etc) You should add a hyphen between purple and hued. Finally, near the end of it, you put " A medium sized table sat on the right side of the fireplace" Between medium and sized you can also add the hyphen. Just my input on it, overall it's fantastic.
AW! Thanks everyone, And I will definitely add more for you. And thanks for the grammar overlook. I appreciate it!
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