By: PAOFUMIISTRASH
(It wont let him uplead so I will for him)

I rushed back outside with my fists clenched tight to where the battle was happening. I stopped, and stood there, still. Frozen like a statue. Watching all my fellow Vikings fall before me. Then I realized it... we can't win this, we are out numbered. That’s when it hit me. I ran to the middle of the battle and yelled, "Stop this at once!". Everyone stopped and back up from eachother. "Where is your commander!?". The knights all looked at eachother then moved aside for their commander. It was a the Warden. I stepped forward and pointed my spear at the Warden as I said " There must be another way to settle this, without this much bloodshed of our people!". He looked at me and looked around at the scene. Finally he responded with, "What is it you had in mind?". I putt my spear on my back along with my shield and proceeded to step forward, getting closer to the warden. I then was face to face with him. " We shall settle this with a duel, if I win, you shall leave at once with your men and never to return." I was worried he would decline until he said "And what if I win? What do I get?" "You get the kingdom and win the battle." He chuckled. "You're just a meer Valkyrie, what thinks you could beat someone like me?" He was right, I was just a valkrie. He then said, "Very well then, ill give you this duel. Don’t say I didn’t warn you.". The knights and vikings then created a big circle for us to fight in. I went to one side and he went to the other. I proceeded to pull out my spear and shield, trying to control my breathing. He pulled out a Handed Longsword and got into his battle stance, so did I. A soldier then said, " Let the duel commence!". Without hesitation I then ran at him and start throwing light hits with my spear. He blocked them with ease.

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By: PAOFUMIISTRASH
(It wont let him uplead so I will for him)

I rushed back outside with my fists clenched tight to where the battle was happening. I stopped, and stood there, still. Frozen like a statue. Watching all my fellow Vikings fall before me. Then I realized it... we can't win this, we are out numbered. That’s when it hit me. I ran to the middle of the battle and yelled, "Stop this at once!". Everyone stopped and back up from eachother. "Where is your commander!?". The knights all looked at eachother then moved aside for their commander. It was a the Warden. I stepped forward and pointed my spear at the Warden as I said " There must be another way to settle this, without this much bloodshed of our people!". He looked at me and looked around at the scene. Finally he responded with, "What is it you had in mind?". I putt my spear on my back along with my shield and proceeded to step forward, getting closer to the warden. I then was face to face with him. " We shall settle this with a duel, if I win, you shall leave at once with your men and never to return." I was worried he would decline until he said "And what if I win? What do I get?" "You get the kingdom and win the battle." He chuckled. "You're just a meer Valkyrie, what thinks you could beat someone like me?" He was right, I was just a valkrie. He then said, "Very well then, ill give you this duel. Don’t say I didn’t warn you.". The knights and vikings then created a big circle for us to fight in. I went to one side and he went to the other. I proceeded to pull out my spear and shield, trying to control my breathing. He pulled out a Handed Longsword and got into his battle stance, so did I. A soldier then said, " Let the duel commence!". Without hesitation I then ran at him and start throwing light hits with my spear. He blocked them with ease.

Paofumiistrash · Answer

Thanks <3

Paofumiistrash · Answer

@rylee88 wrote:

You're Welcome, This is sooooo AMAZING I can picture it in my mind still. It's very well thought out and put together ❤

Thanks chu :3

Rylee88 · Answer

You're Welcome c:

Ferrari · Answer

It reminds me of middle age texts that are translated from old English it's pretty cool

BESTIE PAO

Paofumiistrash · Answer

@ferrari wrote:

It reminds me of middle age texts that are translated from old English it's pretty cool BESTIE PAO

Thanks, i was kinda going for that heh.

madz2345 · Answer

@paofumiistrash wrote:

@ferrari wrote:

It reminds me of middle age texts that are translated from old English it's pretty cool BESTIE PAO

Thanks, i was kinda going for that heh.

dmnz this was intresting

Paofumiistrash · Answer

@madz2345 wrote:

@paofumiistrash wrote:

@ferrari wrote:

It reminds me of middle age texts that are translated from old English it's pretty cool BESTIE PAO

Thanks, i was kinda going for that heh.

dmnz this was intresting

Tryna make it seem like that because i want it to grab the readers attention to make them wanna read more. If that makes sense.

Alexis1415 · Answer

W Pao 😎 Good job

Paofumiistrash · Answer

@alexis1415 wrote:

W Pao 😎 Good job

W Alexis, thanks

Alexis1415 · Answer

np brother in law

AngeI · Answer

Sounds interesting one thing I would highly recommend (which might not be exactly qc friendly) is to add more detail to the scene. "Frozen like a statue. Watching all my fellow Vikings fall before me." Maybe you could explain what in particular he sees that makes him freeze. Maybe you could describe the screams of pain of a viking losing a duel. Or maybe you could have him look at the bodies of his men, or at the state of his men who are wounded by alive / dying. You could also have him think about how this violence and bloodshed will affect the families and friends of everyone involved. The way children will have to grow up without their fathers or etc. Your character has a good drive, he wants to stop the fighting and settle it. However adding some of those details if you want, or some of your own details would help give the scene a more visual aspect and a real feel if that makes sense. Sorry if I seem overcritical its almost 5am and Im just hoping to give some potential pointers because I like what you have so far

Paofumiistrash · Answer

@angei wrote:

Sounds interesting one thing I would highly recommend (which might not be exactly qc friendly) is to add more detail to the scene. "Frozen like a statue. Watching all my fellow Vikings fall before me." Maybe you could explain what in particular he sees that makes him freeze. Maybe you could describe the screams of pain of a viking losing a duel. Or maybe you could have him look at the bodies of his men, or at the state of his men who are wounded by alive / dying. You could also have him think about how this violence and bloodshed will affect the families and friends of everyone involved. The way children will have to grow up without their fathers or etc. Your character has a good drive, he wants to stop the fighting and settle it. However adding some of those details if you want, or some of your own details would help give the scene a more visual aspect and a real feel if that makes sense. Sorry if I seem overcritical its almost 5am and Im just hoping to give some potential pointers because I like what you have so far

I like your idea, Angel. I was gonna add more detail, just wanted to post the more censored virsion on here before i did the details. Also, FIX YOU'RE SLEEP SCHEDULE. And thanks for the idea's.

Sharkattack123 · Answer

Hot girl bummer B)

mtzmario8612 · Answer

This story is AMAZING!!! Keep up the good work!

Paofumiistrash · Answer

@mtzmario8612 wrote:

This story is AMAZING!!! Keep up the good work!

Thanks :3

Thenightstalker · Answer

@madz2345 wrote:

@paofumiistrash wrote:

@ferrari wrote:

It reminds me of middle age texts that are translated from old English it's pretty cool BESTIE PAO

Thanks, i was kinda going for that heh.

dmnz this was intresting

agree!

Alhamdulilliah · Answer

@paofumiistrash  This is so amazing, good job!!!! I love this very much, I can't wait to read more stuff from you!! Keep it up Pao, I believe in you! @rylee88 It's so sweet of you to do that, you're such an amazing person!!! I hope you two an amazing day!

Alhamdulilliah · Answer

@rylee88 wrote:

Like I said, this is Paofumiistrash's not mine.

I know, it's sweet of you to put it for him since it wouldn't let him to it. (:

Alhamdulilliah · Answer

@rylee88 wrote:

Ah, thank you.

You're welcome, have an amazing day!

Paofumiistrash · Answer

@alhamdulilliah wrote:

@rylee88 wrote:

Like I said, this is Paofumiistrash's not mine.

I know, it's sweet of you to put it for him since it wouldn't let him to it. (:

I know right, isnt she the best?

CallMeRevel · Answer

This is good. Goodjob

StrawberryGoddess · Answer

THIS SO AWSOME, does he have more i wold like to read more!!!!

Paofumiistrash · Answer

@callmerevel wrote:

This is good. Goodjob

ok? thanks i guess :l

Paofumiistrash · Answer

@strawberrygoddess wrote:

THIS SO AWSOME, does he have more i wold like to read more!!!!

I do happen to have more, im just thinking about uploading it in future :3.

StrawberryGoddess · Answer

@paofumiistrash wrote:

@strawberrygoddess wrote:

THIS SO AWSOME, does he have more i wold like to read more!!!!

I do happen to have more, im just thinking about uploading it in future :3.

okay, when you do text me please!! <3

Paofumiistrash · Answer

@strawberrygoddess wrote:

@paofumiistrash wrote:

@strawberrygoddess wrote:

THIS SO AWSOME, does he have more i wold like to read more!!!!

I do happen to have more, im just thinking about uploading it in future :3.

okay, when you do text me please!! <3

Ok, i gotchu, ill be sure to let you know when i am posting it :3

StrawberryGoddess · Answer

okay

ImTheBbg · Answer

It's goooood.

Paofumiistrash · Answer

@imthebbg wrote:

It's goooood.

Thanks

navyaniya · Answer

nice

TravisScott · Answer

A slight tear runs down my cheek. This story is very realistic. When you said “ Then I realized it... we can't win this, we are out numbered” I felt this. I can relate to this quote very much because of how my squad is always dying in Squads. This story must be a Fortnite reference, it has to be. @paofumiistrash , you have earned my endorsement.

Paofumiistrash · Answer

@travisscott wrote:

A slight tear runs down my cheek. This story is very realistic. When you said “ Then I realized it... we can't win this, we are out numbered” I felt this. I can relate to this quote very much because of how my squad is always dying in Squads. This story must be a Fortnite reference, it has to be. @paofumiistrash , you have earned my endorsement.

This is the greatest response ever LMAO, and yes, that i referenced to fortnite because when the whole team is dead and your the last one left and its a 3v1 or 2v1 or 4v1, so yeah. And thanks for the feedback xD

Jasonisyours · Answer

Really good bro good stuff

Paofumiistrash · Answer

@jasonisyours wrote:

Really good bro good stuff

thanks, ik.

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