Question

I wrote this short story. I need your honest opinion.
IN COMMENTS.

Answer 1

Trudging through the thick mud and damp leaves, accompanied by the cool damp breeze of autumn. I wondered to myself. I wondered about many things. My mind could not be setted, even by the reassurance that life would be okay from now on. It would not stop. My thoughts that are racing can not be silenced. All of the memories, the flashbacks, the trauma, the pain. I could feel it deep within me, that tonight would be different. It is an overwhelming feeling to miss something. I miss my old life, back home, but since I chose to leave my home to be closer to myself, my spirit and these woods, I have been better. The cold, autumn walks that I took each morning before the dawn arose lightened me. I found myself pondering life itself in these woods. It is a strange phenomenon, to question yourself this deeply. Most individuals that come out here, most of them out here seeking the same as I, lose their mind from the questions brought by themselves. I, however, have fortunately kept my sanity, and actually found it more comforting to be out in a place like this. I say that as though all woodlands find themselves to be similar to these woods, but I assure you, they are not. These woods find themself to be mystical is some way. Not mystical in a way you might think. Its not like any forest you would find in a children's book, their is much more depth in these woods. You can almost feel it in the soil beneath your feet. In the air that you breathe and surrounds you. In the way that the towering limbs overhead majestically sway along with the wind. It is not normal windland, yet at the same time, I can not point out a physical difference. The difference is that of which the deep forest holds within itself and all its secrets. I have dedicated my new life to finding all of its hidden secrets buried within the centuries that have buried them. As I warned, I looked in too deeply. My world fell into a timeless void only sound or knowledge of life was that of the beating of my heart. It started out slow, but my heart rate gradually increased to become like the sound of a train. I could feel the train, its approaching. I feel as if my heart will explode. Closer, closer, the train moving at great speeds, hits me and my eyes jolt open to find myself in the woods still as before. I stand up, only to find that my knees are weak. I feel colder with every passing second. Just as I thought I regained my balance, a great, cold gust of autumn air blows into me. It hits with such force that I am pushed to my knees. My head went spinning and I stood up again. It hits me again with the breeze, only this time, is was harder, much more powerful. It all hit me at once. I had found what people come here to find. The forest is alive. The way the ground moves slightly with each breath. The forest can control things. It was the forest that had pushed me to my knees. I can not handle this, I feel a cold, sharp pain built in my chest. I slowly lose myself as I collapse into my eternal slumber amongst the forest and all her beauty, to aid others if they attempt to find this great gift as I have, but for now, I shall enjoy my slumber.

Answer 2

@tylerthecreative Here is one of my storys that I was talking about, from my competitions.

Answer 3

holy crap

that is fcking amazing, i did notice some spelling errors but other than that its really good

Answer 4

remind me to ask you for suggestions if i ever get stuck in my writing

Answer 5

Honestly I can relate to that story but omg you did so good like bravosix said there are some misspellings but other then that it's an amazing story and you should keep writing

Answer 6

Oh MY GOD!

Answer 7

DO ANOTHER ONE LIKE- RIGHT NOW-!

Answer 8

PLEASE

Answer 9

most impressive!

Answer 10

nice

Answer 11

thats hard dog

Answer 12

This hits hard hoonestly, and it's really good!

Answer 13

Gas

Answer 14

Aye, not bad.

Answer 15

That is amazing. You definitely deserve to win the competition 👏

Answer 16

wow it is so good u should be a writer

Answer 17

That is fcking amazing! you should be an author, like no joke. This is just wow, honestly you should make more of these.

Answer 18

bro mr duck pls unblock me

Answer 19

Nice work! @chuckthedonut

Answer 20

Dangggg !! That is really gooood !! Nice job !! <333

Answer 21

Its good!

Answer 22

I am amazed by how deep this story is. It's good!

Answer 23

good

Answer 24

@tylerthecreative

Answer 25

Its so good babyyy <3

Answer 26

so darn good love it