Question

I wrote a poem for a special someone... Feedback?

Answer 1

My Love, Chi

Your skin glows like the peach, blossoms cute as the sunflower in the purest hope of spring.
My yearning heart rises to your guitar voice and leaps like a black cat at the whisper of your name, Chifuyu.
The evening ascends in on a great hummingbird wing.
I am calmed by your hoodies that I carry into the twilight of flower beams and hold next to my heart.
I am filled with hope that I may dry your tears of sorrow.
As my eyes falls from your eyes, I am reminded of your smile.
In the hushed, I listen for the last splash of the spring.
My heated heart breathes inside my soul. I wait in the crystal moonlight for your secret body so that we may race as one, heart to heart, in search of the glorious orange sensual flowers of love.

Answer 2

from reading it, it looks good! but one thing i can understand is that you were kind of forcing it? right? i would personally let it flow with your natural like my other poem artist friends have told me once, let, it, flow, naturally.

Answer 3

Feedback.

Answer 4

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Answer 5

u did great i think who ever it is will like it it came form your heart

Answer 6

its kinda cliche tbh