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My first regular-length song, by Rari. I have been working on this during my Journalism classes. Please give me your honest feedback. Love you guys! :)

in the depths of the city, where shadows creep
there's a story unfolding, secrets they keep
I can hear brothas voices through these concrete streets
Where guns are the currency and Crips and Bloods run deep
In this world of darkness, where danger's near, they're chasing that money, they'll do what it takes, but in this twisted reality, there's no escape.

They're living on the edge, always on the run A life full of danger, with nowhere to turn They speak with their actions, silence speaks louder than words In this deadly ballet, where lines are blurred

Guns blazing, bullets flying, hearts racing in the night Money flowing, bodies falling, as they fight for their life This is the game they play, where only the strong survive In this world of gang violence, where nobody can hide

Caught in the crossfire of power and greed They're trapped in a cycle that never recedes The streets are their battlefield, a constant war zone But deep down inside, they just want to find home

Amidst the chaos, there are stories untold Of individuals caught up in this world so cold Some forced into it by circumstance or fate Others seeking a sense of belonging, to escape their own slate

But behind every trigger pulled and every life lost There's a web of pain and despair, a great cost The victims extend beyond those who fall in the fray The families shattered, the innocents become dirt, like, swept away

Guns blazing, bullets flying, hearts racing in the night Money flowing, bodies falling, as they fight for their life This is the game they play, where only the strong survive In this world of war, survival becomes the ultimate prize

(:

Answer 1

boi if u dont type something so i can give u a medal i will slap u to pluto.

Answer 2

Sorry Jazz

Answer 3

LOL

Answer 4

bro

Answer 5

GOSH

Answer 6

I don't think he posts stuff for the clout. Bros on a different wave then us

Answer 7

wsg

Answer 8

But is it good

Answer 9

not bad

Answer 10

youre literally amazing rari oh my god.

Answer 11

understandable

Answer 12

the home invasion is wyld lmaoaoaoao 😭🤍

Answer 13

wow it actually sounds good

Answer 14

(jk)

Answer 15

Layla giving a compliment and not trolling?

Answer 16

😭

Answer 17

I KNEW IT SHE WOULD NEVER

Answer 18

HAHAHHA

Answer 19

Thanks for the jk 😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭

Answer 20

lmao

Answer 21

its ok rari she a rare salt, she a bun bun tho

Answer 22

i lost it at "Crips and Bloods run deep"

Answer 23

that part took me all the way out

Answer 24

Ah

Answer 25

its ok rari she would troll if u forgot to put a period somewhere or something was supposed to be capitalized

Answer 26

who wants to do a zoom meeting?
About GOD

Answer 27

Bro what

Answer 28

yea

Answer 29

I love the Lord but this ain't got nothin to do with the post

Answer 30

I'm not no lurker. I'll say it straight your face. Dude, this is amazing. I'm sure you put a lot of thought into this. Each verse conveys a different situation/setting which used such descriptive language in each. There's a lot more I could say, but it's a school night. Keep it up, I'm proud of you
-That Guy Khi

Answer 31

Oh my, Jordan Jordannnnn, this is actually good, I like it.

Answer 32

Thanks based

Answer 33

I can post another one of my songs if y'all want

Answer 34

I wrote it during the summer

Answer 35

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Answer 37

STOP SPAMMING

Answer 38

only me and one other person is in

Answer 39

In the hood where killahs roam
Through the city streets, where danger seeps
A murder in the air, whispers in the wind
Fire ignites, it's a deadly sin

A home invasion, hearts pounding in distress
Fear grips the neighborhood, causing unrest
Survival is the game, you gotta stay strong
In this concrete jungle where bullets shouldn't but do belong

Answer 40

That's all I got right now

Answer 41

This is really god i'm going to say you're going to go far mate.

Answer 42

Thank you!

Answer 43

Dude that song is sick! Really paints a stark picture of that whole gang lifestyle. Your lyrics are on point and I can feel the intensity you were goin for. The melody and flow sounded really dope too. You defs got skills man, keep workin on your craft. Only feedback I have is maybe on the last verse you could find a more positive way to end it, leave people with some hope ya know? But otherwise this is legit, you should be proud. Nice work!

Answer 44

Wowza dudettte

Answer 45

Jk fireeee singgg Rariiii

Answer 46

Bro got all the girls from this 🤣