Question

I made a poem what do you think?

Little girl trapped on her own
Stuck on the freeway with no way home
Stranger walks by with a sly grin
As she looks at him
She notices something in his eyes
Almost like they sparkle at midnight
The look of pure terror
Forever

Answer 1

dark.. and creepy..

Answer 2

Ya

Answer 3

Not bad

Answer 4

Little off-tempo, if you know what i mean. Add a few more lyircs and it'll be spot on

Answer 5

Thanks

Answer 6

Mhm :)

Answer 7

I appreciate the feedback

Answer 8

You're welcome

Answer 9

You should make another one

Answer 10

I might

Answer 11

If you do, post it

Answer 12

Kk I'll do one tommorow

Answer 13

beautiful but scary lol.

Answer 14

Thanks!

Answer 15

i love horror poems there the best ♡♡ .

Answer 16

beautiful poem tho . ♡♡

Answer 17

nice

Answer 18

love itt

Answer 19

the worst

Answer 20

You dont have to like it it's ur opinion

Answer 21

i was jp

Answer 22

Oh well I just want ur honest opinion

Answer 23

why everybody so serious it was a joke yk i dont think its terrible

Answer 24

No I think in my opinion that the poem sucks but I'm tryna improve my writing somi want some feedback

Answer 25

i donnt do poems but for my first time seeing one i was envy

Answer 26

Thank?

Answer 27

I write books

Answer 28

lmaooooo envy means jealous btw

Answer 29

Oh

Answer 30

Cool

Answer 31

Anyone else write books?

Answer 32

Interesting

Answer 33

If you add something with to syllables or two single syllable words in the last line, the flow would be perfect. Currently, just having "forever" throws everything off. Over all, it is pretty vivid, especially with the man walking on or near this freeway amidst traffic. This can be something as simple as a girl stuck in traffic on the way home seeing an unusual man staring as he walks by. But this poem makes it more than that in less words. Great job!

Answer 34

I think give me a medal

Answer 35

Thanks eco

Answer 36

I despise this poem

Answer 37

Um thanks?what do u think I should do different

Answer 38

You are welcome.

Answer 39

wow this is so good. i love this poem. its just like the books I read its so good. good job

Answer 40

its good

Answer 41

its great

Answer 42

woahah

Answer 43

dark..