Poem about a certain month of my life

Driving to a destination
wasting all creation

said to go
declined yet went

the second I saw her
I knew she was mine

her beautiful eyes
and pretty face

Respect to her
respect to her

Question

Poem about a certain month of my life

Driving to a destination
wasting all creation

said to go
declined yet went

the second I saw her
I knew she was mine

her beautiful eyes
and pretty face

Respect to her
respect to her

danielfootball123 · Answer

@uknownprttyfacekayla @graysonunderwoods

danielfootball123 · Answer

This one is trash 😭

still rate it

14X30 · Answer

It's at least a solid 5/10. You could do a lot better by putting some rhyme scheme in there or by putting together some more words. It doesn't need to be just 2 sentences with less than 5 words. it can be upwards of 7 sentences and like 100+ words. you've got this. Basic poem idea though is amazing! Keep up the good work!

SaltySuga · Answer

3/10, I can understand the message but you could have worded it much better and created a flow to it

SsTDOGRednek · Answer

@saltysuga wrote:

3/10, I can understand the message but you could have worded it much better and created a flow to it

I agree, if it had more rhythm, depth, and tone to it, it would be much better. Except I would give it a 4 or 5/10. The overall message is what makes it better. We have all been in a situation where we feel like that about a specific person. I would like to see what other poems you can come up with!

theydontknowmelly · Answer

2/10 it doesnt rlly make sense, maybe add more details and rhythm it would be much better like the others said, overall not bad for a beginning.