Question

I wrote a poem tell me if I needa change anything.

Answer 1

Echoes of the Empty

I gave my hands when theirs were weak,
Spoke words of hope they’d never speak,
Held broken hearts with threads of grace,
And stayed when others left their place.

I lit the lamps when nights grew cold,
Their secrets heavy, mine untold.
Through storms I stood, though none could see
The silent war that raged in me.

But when the weight bent down my soul,
And I reached out to feel them whole
I touched the air, no fingers there,
Just hollow winds and vacant stares.

The ones I loved like breath, like fire,
All vanished when my pulse grew tired.
They praised me once, then disappeared,
When all I needed was them near.

I was the shoulder, I was the shore,
Now I am silence, nothing more.
Each face I cherished slipped away,
Like dusk dissolving into day.

And still I stand, though none remain,
A monument to quiet pain.
For love, it seems, was never mine
Just passing shadows in my shine.

Answer 2

WOW! I like it a lot! Honestly, I don't see anything you can change about it. GOOD JOB!!!!

Answer 3

Isn’t that from the lyric generator website? They usually put something like “whispers” or “echoes” in the name and it just seems like the structure of one of theirs

Answer 4

Oh? Let's hope not.

Answer 5

Yk what sure

Answer 6

Ion have energy to even argue w some kid on the Internet

Answer 7

i was just asking, no need to be so hostile about it

Answer 8

not that serious

Answer 9

Kk

Answer 10

Oh that's a cute poem