Question

How do I make a poem about an aborted fetus without sounding pro-choice/pro-life?

Answer 1

think it as an animal

Answer 2

I was leaning towards thinking of it like a meal.

Answer 3

hahaha. stop thinking. bite it.

Answer 4

Gotta love fetus humor. I already wrote the poem. Just testing the site out.

Answer 5

share.

Answer 6

To the Late Mr. Fetus

You had the means to be,
Yet, you clearly never were.
In reality it's nothing but absurd.
I speak of us of course.
We the ones who are
As well as those who've been,
All who claim the scar.

You laugh at us I surely know,
I too laugh at you and I for
We'll live out our traceless lives
Claiming our own significance
Divinely vulgar I would say.
We are only slightly different,

You and I.
The great farce called mankind is known
Only to You and I.

Answer 7

The use of the word "absurd" in your first stanza immediately takes you away from being objective. You have picked a challenging topic to write about, and it is further challenging to act as an impartial observer. Throughout the poem I don't get the feeling that you are impartial, but pro-choice. There's an edge to your voice in the first stanza, specifically in the line "yet, you clearly never were." The use of the word "clearly" implies the feeling that anyone that would think that such a fetus were to be, is foolish for thinking so.
If you want to be objective in this poem, than you must tread carefully with the words that you use. Have you thought of using an analogy? I think it would work really well for a tough topic such as this.

Answer 8

I think you're focusing on the first stanza too much. Poems are meant to be read in their entirety. Absurd has more than one meaning, I mean the one closest to farcical, and I don't mean that the abortion is farcical, but mankind's clinging to meaning and importance placed in their own lives.To be honest I've had people interpret it both ways. I like the poem as it stands actually. This is something old that I've written and I've already gotten a grade for it.

Answer 9

Hmm just offering some constructive criticism, I was unaware that you were only seeking self-validation.

Answer 10

I do appreciate it though :)
I just wanted to test this site out and see what kind of people were on here. This question was more for the lulz.

Answer 11

I really liked it! Good job!

Answer 12

but what did u mean 2nd line of the 3rd stanza when u said "I for" ?

Answer 13

The "for" references the following lines, the reason why we are laughing. It's a bit of an awkward break I know but I think it's necessary for the emphasis I want.